Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain with one or two specific details. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., "didn't allow") and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Not really. My father was quite strict, so he rarely let my sister and me go to parks or basketball courts when we were young. If I had the chance back then, I would have enjoyed visiting parks with friends to play and explore.

提案: Clarify the meaning and correct grammar. Use one or two clear sentences: state whether you like parks now and give a specific reason. Fix tense and pronoun issues (e.g., "I can get to know people who have dogs"). Remove hesitations.

例: Yes, I do. I often walk my sister's dog in a nearby park, and I enjoy meeting other dog owners there because it's a friendly way to socialize and practise my conversation skills.

提案: Finish your idea and be specific about how more parks would help. Combine sentences to be concise and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so that"). Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

例: Definitely. I live in Taipei, and because air pollution is getting worse, I believe creating more parks would improve local air quality and provide residents with green spaces for exercise and relaxation.

提案: Be more decisive and give a brief reason for your choice. Use correct names and a smoother phrasing without fillers ("uh"). Add one specific detail about why you want to visit that park.

例: I don't have a long list, but I'd love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the US because of its unique geysers and wildlife; I want to see the geothermal features and photograph the scenery.

× When I was a child my dad was strict so he didn't allowed me and my sister to hang out outside like a park or basketball courts.

✓ When I was a child my dad was strict so he didn't allow my sister and me to hang out outside, like in a park or on basketball courts.

The modal/auxiliary 'did' requires the base form of the verb 'allow', not the past form 'allowed'. Also 'me and my sister' should be 'my sister and me' for natural word order, and use prepositions 'in' for park and 'on' for courts for correct collocation.

× But if I have a chance I think I would like to go to a park with my friends.

✓ But if I have a chance, I think I would like to go to a park with my friends.

Add a comma after the conditional clause for clarity. The tense/modal 'would like' is acceptable for a hypothetical polite desire; no verb form change needed.

× Well, sometimes I would walk my sister's dog to a park nearby my house, our house and I really like it 'cause I can know I can no get to know someone who have has a dog.

✓ Well, sometimes I walk my sister's dog to a park near my house, and I really like it because I can get to know someone who has a dog.

Use simple present 'walk' for habitual action rather than 'would walk' here. 'Nearby my house' is incorrect, use 'near my house'. Remove the extra 'our house'. 'Cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'I can know I can no get to know' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'I can get to know someone'. Use 'has' (third person singular) not 'have' or 'has' combined incorrectly.

× Now I'm living in Taipei. It is a capital city of Taiwan.

✓ Now I'm living in Taipei. It is the capital city of Taiwan.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'capital city' because it is a specific, unique role for the country.

× I think the air pollution situation is getting worse, so I think if we have more parks, we can.

✓ I think the air pollution situation is getting worse, so I think if we have more parks, we can improve it.

The clause 'we can' is incomplete and needs an object or verb to complete the idea. Adding 'improve it' clarifies the expected result. 'Getting' (present participle) is correct in 'is getting worse'.

× Well actually I have no idea, but I know the US has a lot of huge park so I would probably go to uh Yellowstone Park in the future.

✓ Well, actually I have no idea, but I know the US has a lot of huge parks so I would probably go to Yellowstone Park in the future.

Use the plural 'parks' after 'a lot of' because 'a lot of' modifies countable plural nouns. 'Yellowstone Park' is acceptable, though 'Yellowstone National Park' is the full name; 'uh' should be omitted in formal responses.