Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and slightly more detailed. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid fillers like 'uh'.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played cricket and football there with my friends, and we usually stayed for hours because there were large open fields to run around in.

提案: Respond directly and clearly, correcting grammar (use present simple or present perfect appropriately). Use a linking word to explain why and provide a specific example of when you visit a park.

例: Not as often as before, because I don't have much free time. However, I sometimes visit a park on weekends to relax and get some exercise, for example when the weather is nice I go for a 30-minute walk.

提案: Clarify your main point (yes or no) and give a clear reason. Use linking words ('because', 'but', 'however') and give a specific suggestion or example of where a new park would be useful. Remove hesitations and repetition.

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because current green spaces are limited. For instance, a new park near the residential area would provide a safe place for children to play and for adults to exercise.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your intention, then add one specific reason or detail and a time frame. Use correct tense and avoid repeated hesitations.

例: Yes, there is a new garden that recently opened near my home, and I plan to visit it soon. I want to go next weekend to see the flower displays and try the walking paths with my family.

× Yes, of course, I always been playing cricket or football, uh, with my friend, uh, in the park.

✓ Yes, of course, I always played cricket or football with my friends in the park.

The original uses 'been playing' which is an incorrect present perfect continuous form without auxiliary 'have'. The intended meaning is a habitual action in the past, so simple past 'played' or 'used to play' is appropriate. Also 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the habitual social activity. Suggestion: use 'I always played' or 'I used to play' and 'friends' for natural phrasing.

× No, but no, I don't didn't have any much many more time to visit a park, but sometime I take some time to visit it.

✓ No, I don't have much time to visit parks now, but sometimes I take time to visit one.

The original mixes present and past negatives ('don't didn't') which is incorrect. Use present simple 'don't have' for current lack of time. 'Any much many' is redundant; use 'much' with uncountable 'time'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' for occasional actions. Use plural 'parks' or 'one' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify to 'I don't have much time' and use 'sometimes'.

× No, uh, near my hometown, not very, uh, more park in situated in uh nearby. But uh yes, I visit to a new park so situated in nearby area. So I always have staying and visited uh, other time.

✓ No, near my hometown there are not many parks nearby. But I did visit a new park that is situated in a nearby area, and I have visited it other times.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect: 'park in situated in nearby' should be 'is situated nearby' or 'situated in a nearby area'. 'Not very more' is wrong; use 'not many' for countable 'parks'. 'I visit to a new park' should be 'I visited a new park' (past simple) or 'I have visited'. 'I always have staying and visited other time' is ungrammatical; interpret as 'I have visited it other times.' Suggestion: use correct word order 'there are not many parks nearby' and correct verb forms 'visited' or 'have visited'.

× Yes, uh, recently, uh, one, uh, garden, uh, open uh, near my home. So, uh, I, I remembered and I interested to visit it, but I'd been there time to visit it. So I, uh, plan to visit, uh.

✓ Yes, recently a garden opened near my home, so I remember it and I am interested in visiting it. I have not had time to go yet, but I plan to visit.

The sentence lacks correct 'there is/are' and verb forms: 'one garden open near my home' should be 'a garden opened' (past simple) or 'a garden has opened' (present perfect). 'I remembered' is inappropriate; use 'I remember it'. 'I interested to visit' should be 'I am interested in visiting it'. 'I'd been there time to visit it' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'I haven't had time to visit it' or 'I have not had time.' Suggestion: use 'a garden opened' or 'a garden has opened', 'I am interested in visiting', and 'I have not had time to visit it'.