Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer past-tense and more concise, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific memory or detail. Use linking words correctly and avoid grammatical errors (e.g., tense consistency, capitalization).

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. They had many activities such as swings and slides, and I often spent whole afternoons playing tag with my friends near the big oak tree.

提案: Combine ideas into a coherent response with correct tense and linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then contrast past and present using linking words like "now" or "whereas". Fix grammar (e.g., 'unwind' → 'unwind', 'play' → 'played').

例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. Nowadays I go to unwind and exercise, whereas as a child I mainly went to play with my friends.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with a specific reason and avoid vague or repetitive phrasing. Use conditional forms correctly and simplify sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because current green space is limited. If there were more parks, residents could enjoy outdoor activities and I could visit different areas for walks or picnics.

提案: Be specific about locations and why you want to visit them. Use correct place names and clearer sentence structure, and mention concrete activities or sights to make the answer vivid.

例: Yes, I hope to visit national parks in Iceland and Greenland because of their dramatic landscapes. I would like to hike along scenic trails, have a picnic with friends, and take photos of the unique scenery.

× Yes, I love going to the park as a child because there are a lot of activities there, For example, swings, slides and even you can play with your friends.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because there were a lot of activities there. For example, swings, slides, and you could play with your friends.

The speaker is referring to childhood, so past tense should be used (loved, were, could). Also punctuation and conjunctions were adjusted for clarity and grammaticality. Use 'could' to express ability in the past and separate sentences with a period. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I still love going to parks. Now as an adult I usually go there for unwind to exercise and breathe some fresh air. But when I was a kid I play with my friends.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks. Now as an adult I usually go there to unwind, to exercise, and to breathe some fresh air. But when I was a kid I played with my friends.

The phrase 'for unwind' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to unwind'. The list of activities needs parallel infinitives ('to unwind, to exercise, and to breathe'). The final clause refers to the past, so use past tense 'played' instead of 'play'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Of course, I would love that to see more parks in my city. Actually it is limited only here. If only I can go other place, there are a lot of parks there and that I can visit, I can take a tour.

✓ Of course, I would love to see more parks in my city. Actually, it is limited here. If only I could go to other places, there would be a lot of parks I could visit and take tours of.

The phrase 'would love that to see' is incorrect; say 'would love to see'. 'If only I can' should be conditional past 'could' in a hypothetical; also use 'go to other places'. Use 'there would be' for hypothetical existence and 'could visit' for ability in the conditional. Grammar problem type ID:4

× There are parts that I want to go in the future, example, like in Greenland, Iceland, there are so beautiful parks there, very scenic view that we can do a picnic there.

✓ There are places I want to go to in the future. For example, in Greenland and Iceland there are very beautiful parks with scenic views where we can have picnics.

Use 'places' rather than 'parts' and include the preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'Example' should be 'For example'. 'So beautiful parks' is awkward; use 'very beautiful parks' and plural 'views'. 'Do a picnic' is nonnative; use 'have picnics'. Correct prepositions and word choice for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I can play with my friends there. So yeah.

✓ I could play with my friends there.

Because the speaker is talking about future or hypothetical visits, 'could' is more appropriate to express possibility. If referring to a definite future plan, 'I will be able to play' could also be used. The short 'So yeah' is acceptable colloquialism but not necessary. Grammar problem type ID:6