Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要用正确的时态并且精简、连贯。可先用主题句直接回答（例如：Yes, I loved going to parks as a child），然后用一到两句具体细节支持，注意复数和冠词（a park/the parks）、人称一致和避免重复。可以用连接词如 because / so / and 来组织句子。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went there with my friends after school because it helped me relax, and we would share funny stories and play games together.

提案: 回答要直接并用现在时表达现在的习惯，避免重复和语法错误。开头用明确的主题句（例如：Not really，I rarely go to parks now），然后说明原因并提供具体活动细节，使用连接词 like because / so / because of that。

例: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I don't like going alone, so I prefer playing sports or video games with friends, which also helps me relax.

提案: 回答应先给出直接意见（Yes/No + brief reason），并避免重复。注意词汇准确（parks 而非 partners），并给出具体例子或频率说明。使用连接词 like because / for example / sometimes 来组织信息。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because public green spaces improve people's health. For example, my family and I sometimes visit local parks to walk or have a picnic.

提案: 回答要明确并且语法正确。若没有特定公园可说 so, explain alternative plans (e.g., travel to see landscapes). 用简单清晰句子并提供具体例子或目的，避免口头语和重复。

例: Not really, there isn't any particular park I plan to visit. Instead, I hope to travel to different places in the future to see varied landscapes and relax, such as coastal parks or national reserves.

× Yes, I like going to park when I was a child because when I go, I often go to park with my friends after after school.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I often went to the park with my friends after school.

句子谈论过去的习惯，应使用过去时。将 like -> liked, go -> went，並把可数名词 park 用复数或加定冠词（parks 或 the park），去掉多余的“after”。建议：描述过去常做的事时用一般过去时，且公园应使用复数或定冠词。

× It can make me feel relaxed and I can share some funny and interesting with my friend.

✓ It made me feel relaxed, and I could share some funny and interesting things with my friends.

“some funny and interesting”后缺少名词，需加“things”；同时主语为复数朋友应使用 friends。过去时态与前句保持一致，且量词搭配完整。建议：名词前形容词短语需有中心名词；注意单复数一致。

× Uh, actually not now I didn't go.

✓ Uh, actually I don't go now.

原句混用了现在和过去时（didn't go 表过去），而问句问现在习惯，应用一般现在时：don't go。建议：描述现在的习惯用一般现在时。

× I don't like going to park now because I, I don't want to go to park alone.

✓ I don't like going to the park now because I don't want to go to the park alone.

可数名词 park 前需加定冠词 the（特指去公园这一行为），两处遗漏需补上。建议：固定表达“go to the park”要加定冠词。

× So I often play some games or sports with my friends.

✓ So I often play games or do sports with my friends.

英文中通常说 play games 或 do sports，用 play some games 也可，但 play sports 不常用，应改为 do sports。建议：搭配正确的动词与名词（play games / do sports）。

× Is this thing it can make me feel relaxed now.

✓ This can make me feel relaxed now.

原句有多余代词 and 语序混乱（Is this thing it...），应直接陈述：This can make me feel relaxed now。建议：避免多余代词，保持简单陈述句语序。

× In my city there are many partners, there are many parks and sometimes, uh, sometimes I will go to park where my family.

✓ In my city there are many parks, and sometimes I will go to the park with my family.

原句中 partners 是拼写或用词错误，应为 parks；“go to park”需加定冠词 the；“where my family”用法错误，应为 with my family（和家人一起）。建议：注意拼写和介词/短语搭配（go to the park with my family）。

× Uh, actually not there is there are no park which I want to go in the future.

✓ Uh, actually there are no parks I want to go to in the future.

构造存在句应为 there are；park 应用复数 parks；关系从句中介词位置常置于动词之后或在末尾：want to go to。建议：使用 there are + 复数名词，并把介词 to 放在动词短语末尾。

× Umm, but but uh, however I will do. I will travel to other some to look at some other landscapes to make me feel funny and relaxed.

✓ Umm, but I will travel to other places to see different landscapes to make me feel happy and relaxed.

原句中“other some”词序错误，应为 other places；“look at some other landscapes”可以改为 see different landscapes；“funny”用法不当，应为 happy。整个句子需流畅地使用不定式表示目的。建议：注意限定词和形容词的正确搭配（other places, different landscapes, happy）。