Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap karışık ve tekrarlarla dolu; konuyu doğrudan net bir cümleyle belirtmeli ve ardından kısa bir gerekçe eklemelisiniz. Gereksiz dolgu kelimelerini (uh, umm) azaltın ve cümleleri basitçe bağlaçlarla düzenleyin. Örneğin, önce net bir cevap verin (Evet/Hayır), sonra 'because' ile nedeninizi açıklayın ve bir örnek ekleyin.

例: No, I didn't like going to parks as a child because I grew up in a village where there were few formal parks. For example, my friends and I usually played in open fields near our houses rather than visiting playgrounds.

提案: Cevap olumlu ama dağınık ve tekrarlar fazla; önce net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından sebebi ve kısa bir örnek verin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, for example) kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın. Ayrıca 'usually' gibi zaman zarflarını doğru konuma koyun.

例: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because I have a son and we often visit them together. For example, we usually go to the park on weekends to play football and have a picnic.

提案: Cevap açık ama karışık dilbilgisi ve tekrarlar var; doğrudan 'No' veya 'Yes' ile başlayıp nedeninizi belirtin. Tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin (parks, are). Kısa bir öneri ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin.

例: No, I don't think we need many more parks in Ankara because the city already has a lot of green spaces. However, improving facilities like playgrounds and benches would make them more useful for families.

提案: Cevap niyet belirtse de netlik düşük; açıkça hangi parkları veya hangi tür parkları görmek istediğinizi söyleyin ve nedenini ekleyin. Özel isimler veya türler vererek daha spesifik olun (e.g., national parks, Yellowstone).

例: Yes, I would like to visit large natural parks in the United States, such as Yellowstone National Park, because I want to see wildlife and impressive landscapes. I hope to go on guided hikes and take photographs of the scenery.

× Uh, I like, uh. When I, when, when I was a child, I umm, didn't like, uh, go, uh, going to park, uh, because, uh, I grew up, uh, in a village.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't like going to the park because I grew up in a village.

The sentence contains present tense phrasing 'I like' that conflicts with the past-time context; the main clause should use simple past 'didn't like'. Use the gerund 'going' after 'like' or 'didn't like' rather than combining 'go' and 'going'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to parks in general in a specific context. Suggestion: use simple past for childhood habits and correct verb forms: 'When I was a child, I didn't like going to the park.'

× Yes, I like going to parks now because, uh, I have a son uh, and uh, I usually, uh, go, go to park, uh, go to park, uh, he's.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now because I have a son, and I usually go to the park with him.

Use simple present for habitual actions ('I like', 'I usually go'). Include the definite article 'the' when saying 'go to the park' referring to a specific usual place. The original ends with an incomplete fragment 'he's'; correct form is 'with him' to indicate accompanying the son. Suggestion: say 'I usually go to the park with him.'

× Actually, uh, uh, I live in Ankara, uh, and uh, in Ankara, uh Ankara, uh, have a lot of uh park, umm, those park is uh, enough.

✓ Actually, I live in Ankara, and Ankara has a lot of parks; those parks are enough.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'Ankara' requires 'has' not 'have'. Use plural 'parks' when referring to multiple parks. Also 'those parks are enough' uses plural verb 'are' to match plural noun. Suggestion: ensure verb number matches subject and use plural nouns when referring to multiple items.

× Yes, there are, uh, I uh, want to go to uh, in uh, America, America parks, uh, and uh, the big parks, uh, in nature parks.

✓ Yes, there are. I want to go to parks in America, especially large natural parks.

The original is disfluent and repeats words. Use present simple 'I want' to express a desire (not future tense). 'America parks' is incorrect word order; use 'parks in America'. 'The big parks in nature parks' is unclear; replace with 'large natural parks' for clarity. Suggestion: keep concise: 'I want to go to parks in America, especially large natural parks.'