Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要直接且语法正确。注意时态和词序，避免冗长或重复。可以用一两句概述再补充具体细节，例如常去做什么、印象最深的活动。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played with neighborhood dogs and enjoyed looking at the flowers and trees, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 注意语法和词汇搭配（例如 "relieved" 或 "relaxed"），句子要更简洁，用连接词自然衔接原因和结果，并给出具体例子说明如何放松。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and forget about my stressful work. For example, I like walking among trees and sitting on a bench while listening to birds, which calms me down.

提案: 注意语法、比较级和冠词（例如 "many more"、"fresher"）。回答时先给出直接立场，再用两个具体理由支持，并用连接词如 "because"、"also" 来串联。

例: Yes, I would. More parks would benefit people and pets because they provide space for exercise and socialising, and they also improve air quality, which is healthier for everyone.

提案: 改进语法和句子连贯性，使用正确的表述（例如 "there are few people"），并具体说明想去的公园名字或活动，给出一两句细节。

例: I would love to visit a park in Australia, especially because of the sunny weather and open spaces. I imagine going for long walks there without crowds, relaxing in the sunshine and watching native birds.

× I really like when to park when I am child because I can see beautiful sceneries there and I can also play with dogs there.

✓ I really liked going to parks when I was a child because I could see beautiful scenery there and I could also play with dogs.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式 和 时态/冠词。句中“I really like when to park”中的结构不正确，动词“like”后面若表示习惯性或过去的活动，应接动名词“going”或不带“when to”。另外“when I am child”时态和冠词错误，描述过去应为“when I was a child”。“sceneries”复数不自然，应用不可数名词“scenery”。建议：使用“like/loved + doing”结构表达喜欢做某事，注意过去时间用过去时并加不定冠词。

× Yes of course when I get older I think go to park can make me feel released and which is a good way for me to escape from my heavy life.

✓ Yes, of course. Now that I'm older, I think going to the park can make me feel relaxed and is a good way for me to escape from my stressful life.

问题类型：现在时态及动名词使用、形容词/代词错误。原句中“when I get older”与后文混用现在时和将来意味且位置不当，应改为描述现在的“Now that I'm older”或若是将来则用将来时。动词短语应为“going to the park”。“feel released”用词不当，正确为“feel relaxed”。“which is a good way”在句中做定语从句位置错误，改为并列句“and is a good way”。“heavy life”表达不自然，改为“stressful life”。建议：用“going to the park”表达去公园，注意形容词选择并把从句改为合适的连词或并列结构。

× Also go to park can make my eyes feel more comfortable to see green.

✓ Also, going to the park makes my eyes feel more comfortable seeing greenery.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式 与 冠词。原句缺少动名词形式，应用“going to the park”。“can make ... to see green”中“不定式+see”结构不对，改用“feel comfortable seeing greenery”或“comfortable looking at green spaces”。同时“park”前需定冠词或复数形式，根据习惯使用“the park”或“parks”。建议：用动名词作主语，用合适的名词“greenery/green spaces”。

× Yes, parks can not only good for people but are also good for pets to have fun with each other.

✓ Yes, parks can not only be good for people but also be good for pets to play in.

问题类型：形容词/副词使用 和 助动词缺失。原句“can not only good”缺少系动词，应为“can be good”。并列结构中“but are also”与前半句时态不一致，改为并列平行的“can not only be ... but also be ...”。另外“have fun with each other”用于宠物之间互相玩耍可简化为“play in”或“play together”。建议：保证并列结构中谓语形式一致，补上“be”。

× Also man more parks can make the air more fresher which is good to people's health.

✓ Also, many more parks can make the air fresher, which is good for people's health.

问题类型：形容词使用与数量词。原句“man more parks”拼写并使用错误，应为“many more parks”。“more fresher”出现双重比较级错误，应只用“fresher”。“good to people's health”介词用法不当，正确为“good for people's health”。建议：不要在比较级前再加“more”；“good for”搭配健康。

× There have few people and there that will not make me feel busy and feel crowded.

✓ There are few people there, so it will not make me feel busy or crowded.

问题类型：there be 结构 与 连词。原句“There have few people”主语和谓语不一致，应为“There are few people”。“and there that”词序和代词使用错误，应合并为“there, so”。“feel busy and feel crowded”重复“feel”，可并列为“feel busy or crowded”。建议：使用正确的there be 结构（there is/are），用合适的连词连接因果关系。

× I can also enjoy the sunshine there.

✓ I can also enjoy the sunshine there.

问题类型：单复数（检查通过）。该句语法正确，无需修改。保留原句。