Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan olumlu fakat dilbilgisi ve akıcılık sorunları var. Tek cümledeki zaman uyumsuzluğu ve özne-fiil uyumsuzluğunu düzeltin (ör. "I liked" ve "my friends would come" ya da "my friends used to come"). Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve en fazla 2-3 kısa cümleyle destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin (nerede oynadığınız veya ne yaptığınız gibi). Bağlaç olarak "because" veya "and" kullanarak cümleleri mantıklı şekilde bağlayın.

例: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I often went there with my friends. We used to play on the swings and have picnics near the trees.

提案: Cevap net ama kısır ve konuşma dolgu sözcükleri içeriyor. Olumsuz yanıt verirken nedeninizi daha düzgün ve doğal bir yapı ile belirtin (ör. "not much these days because..."). Ayrıca bağlaçlarla nedeni genişletin ve cümleleri daha akıcı yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları atın.

例: Not really — I don't go to parks much nowadays because I'm 17 and I spend most of my time studying for exams. Sometimes I visit a park briefly to relax after studying.

提案: Cevap aynen olumsuz ve dil bilgisi hataları içeriyor (ör. "that park is enough" veya "there are enough parks"). Ayrıca mantıksal gerekçe eksik; neden yeterli olduğunu ve kimlerin kullandığını daha açık belirtin. Bağlaçlarla gerekçeyi genişletin (ör. "because" veya "so").

例: I don't think we need many more parks because the existing ones are sufficient for families and children. They are well-distributed across the city and most people can reach one easily.

提案: İyi bir kişisel tercih ifadesi ama kelime seçimi ve yapı geliştirilmeli. "Disneyland" bir park örneği; nedenini daha doğal anlatın (ör. nostalgia, attractions). "I miss my childhood" ve "I will feel very happy" gibi ifadeleri daha doğal ve akıcı biçimde birleştirin. Gereksiz tekrarları ("I feel I will feel") kaldırın.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit Disneyland in the future because it reminds me of my childhood and has many fun attractions. I think visiting there would make me feel nostalgic and very happy.

× Well, yes, I like liked going to the parks when I was a child and my friends was coming with me We.

✓ Well, yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child and my friends used to come with me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past context; use past 'liked' for childhood memories (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'The parks' is unnecessary; use plural 'parks' or no article. 'my friends was' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'used to come' or 'would come' to indicate habitual past. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and use 'used to' for repeated actions.

× No, I don't like going to park. No, uh, I'm 17 years old. That's why I should study.

✓ No, I don't like going to the park. I'm 17 years old, so I should study.

Omitting the definite article before 'park' is incorrect in this general statement; use 'the park' or 'parks' (Article errors, ID 22). Also streamline the sentence by removing filler 'No, uh' and use a coordinating connector 'so' to show cause and effect. Keep present tense for current preference and obligation.

× No, that's park is enough and the child can go park.

✓ No, that park is enough and children can go to the park.

'That's park' lacks the determiner 'that' + noun requires article: 'that park' (Article errors, ID 22). 'the child' is too specific; if speaking generally use 'children' or 'a child'. Also 'go park' needs the preposition 'to' before 'park' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Suggestion: use 'children can go to the park' for general meaning.

× Actually, yes, I want to visit Disneyland because there is a cartoon and I miss my child childhood. So if I go there I feel I will feel very happy.

✓ Actually, yes, I want to visit Disneyland because it has cartoons and I miss my childhood. If I go there, I think I will feel very happy.

'There is a cartoon' is unnatural; use 'it has cartoons' or 'it's full of cartoons'. 'my child childhood' is incorrect repetition; use 'my childhood' (Present tense issue and Past tense/word choice, ID 6 and 5). 'I feel I will feel' is redundant; use 'I think I will feel' or 'I will feel'. Suggestion: correct noun phrase to 'my childhood' and avoid repeating verbs; use 'I think' for predictions.