Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short supporting detail. Avoid tense errors and unnecessary words. For example, use past tense and say why you liked parks (activities or feelings).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the trees because it felt free and exciting.

提案: Give a direct, fluent response with reduced hesitation and correct prepositions. Use linking phrase to explain reason and keep it to two sentences. Replace fillers with pauses or short linking words.

例: To be honest, I don't go to parks much now because I'm busy with my studies. As a result, I rarely have time for outdoor activities.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar (plural nouns, articles). Use one linking phrase to support your view and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid vague words like 'lost child'—use 'children'.

例: Yes, I would. More parks would give children more places to play and families more options for weekend outings, which would improve community life.

提案: Be specific and accurate with names and grammar, use present/future tense correctly, and give concise reasons. Remove hesitations and use linking words to list reasons. Mention one or two clear motivations (history, scenery, wildlife).

例: Yes, I'd love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the future because I'm interested in its geological features and wildlife. Also, I want to enjoy the scenery and learn more about the park's history.

× Yes, I would like to go into park as a child.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to parks as a child.

The student is describing a habitual past situation. 'Would like' expresses desire now; 'used to' or 'liked' correctly indicates past habitual action. Also 'go into park' is incorrect preposition and article use; use plural 'parks' or 'the park' and 'going to' is natural. Suggestion: use 'used to' or 'liked' plus 'going to parks'. Conjunction of errors: present tense wrong for past meaning and article/preposition errors.

× To be honest, I do not like to go into parks now and because I think umm, I'm struggling in academic work so I have no time to umm, go to parks.

✓ To be honest, I do not like going to parks now because I am struggling with academic work, so I have no time to go to parks.

Use present tense 'do not like' for current habit, but the verb after 'like' should be the -ing form: 'like going'. 'Go into parks' is unnatural; use 'go to parks'. 'I'm struggling in academic work' should be 'struggling with academic work'. Remove redundant 'and because'. Suggestion: use 'like going to' and 'struggling with' and combine clauses clearly.

× Maybe yes I think so because more parks means more entertainment for lost child and I think child would like to go to park as umm I do before.

✓ Maybe, yes. I think so because more parks mean more entertainment for children, and I think children would like to go to parks as I did before.

'More parks' is plural so the verb must be plural: 'mean' not 'means' (subject-verb agreement). 'Lost child' is incorrect; use 'children' or 'a lost child' depending on meaning. 'Child' should be plural matching context. 'Go to park' needs article or plural: 'go to parks'. 'I do before' is wrong tense; use 'I did before'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use plural nouns consistently, and correct past reference.

× Oh, I think maybe on Yellowstone National parks because I really, I'm the huge fans of historical, so I want to explore the historical in national parks and also, umm, appreciate the environment and the fields.

✓ Oh, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park because I am a huge fan of history, so I want to explore the historical sites in national parks and also appreciate the environment and the scenery.

Several issues: 'on Yellowstone National parks' is incorrect preposition and pluralization; use 'visit Yellowstone National Park'. 'I'm the huge fans of historical' mixes singular and plural and uses wrong noun form; use 'I am a huge fan of history'. 'Explore the historical' needs noun: 'historical sites'. 'Fields' is awkward; 'scenery' or 'landscapes' is better. Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('visit'), singular/plural agreement, correct noun forms ('history', 'historical sites'), and choose precise vocabulary.