Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant words (“talk”). Start with a direct response, then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use simple linking words if you add details (e.g., because, and, so).

例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they had playgrounds where I could climb and swing. I also went there often with my family for picnics and games, so I have many happy memories.

提案: Your answer is grammatically incorrect and vague. Give a clear statement (yes/no) and explain why with specific reasons. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words (for example, because, but, although).

例: Not really – as a teenager I don’t go to parks as much because I’m busy with school and social activities. However, I sometimes visit a park to exercise or relax on weekends.

提案: This answer is mostly clear but has small vocabulary and grammar errors (parts → parks; take a rest → rest/relax). Improve by adding a specific reason or example and a linking word to make it sound natural.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide quiet places to relax and exercise. For example, a new park near my home would be great for morning walks and for families to spend time outdoors.

提案: Your idea is understandable but the sentence is long and repetitive. Start with a clear statement about the park you want to visit, then give two specific features you expect to find, using linking words like “and” or “such as.” Avoid repeating words (have, I can).

例: I would like to visit a large city park in the future that has lots of sports facilities and playgrounds. For instance, it would be nice if the park had football fields, a children’s play area, and plenty of benches to sit and relax.

× As a child, of course I'd like to talk.

✓ As a child, of course I liked to go to parks.

The student used 'I'd like to talk' which is incorrect for the question about going to parks and mixes present conditional with past context. The tense should be past simple 'liked' to match 'Did you like...' and the verb phrase should be 'liked to go to parks' or 'liked going to parks.' Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and choose the correct verb collocation (like + to-infinitive or like + -ing). (Grammar problem type IDs: 5 and 26).

× Now I as a teenager I maybe not like going to pass.

✓ Now, as a teenager, I may not like going to parks.

Errors: incorrect word order, incorrect modal form 'maybe' and wrong noun 'pass'. Use 'may not' (modal + base verb) for present possibility and 'going to parks' as the correct noun. Also add commas for clarity and remove redundant subject 'I'. Suggestion: place 'as a teenager' between commas and use 'may not like' or 'don't really like' depending on certainty. (Grammar problem type IDs: 6 and 16 and 11).

× Yes, I would like to see more parts in my city because I can have more places to take a rest.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I would have more places to rest.

'parts' is a wrong word; should be 'parks' (vocabulary error). Also 'can have' is less appropriate than 'would have' when expressing a result of more parks. 'Take a rest' is a direct translation; native phrasing is 'rest' or 'have a rest.' Suggestion: use 'parks' and 'would have more places to rest.' (Grammar problem type IDs: 1 and 26).

× I want to go to a very big park in the future and in that park may have lots of things that I can play or I can have a chair that I can have a rest.

✓ I want to go to a very big park in the future, and that park may have lots of things to play on and chairs where I can rest.

Several issues: incorrect use of 'may have' word order (There be issue) — use 'that park may have' or 'there may be' — and awkward phrasing 'lots of things that I can play' should be 'things to play on' or 'play with.' 'I can have a chair that I can have a rest' is repetitive; better 'chairs where I can rest.' Suggestion: use 'may have' with the subject before it, use appropriate verb patterns (things to play on, chairs where...), and simplify 'can' repetition. (Grammar problem type IDs: 4 and 3 and 26).