Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), shorten and organize into a clear topic sentence + 1–2 supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'which' to connect ideas. Be specific about activities or feelings to add concreteness.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played tag and climbed trees there, which kept me physically active and helped me relax. Because of those visits I usually felt happier and more energetic the next day.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct verb forms, avoid colloquial contractions like '’cause' in formal test, and add a concrete example of how parks help you (e.g., walking, reading). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to make the reason clear.

例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. I go for a 30-minute walk there after work because it clears my mind and reduces stress, so I can plan the next day more calmly and feel more positive.

提案: Make the response more concise and correct grammar (plural forms, pronouns). Give a specific reason why more parks would help the community (e.g., health, social space) and avoid vague phrases like 'anything' or 'gain knowledge' without explanation.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces for exercise and socializing. For example, a new park near my neighborhood would encourage families to spend time outdoors and improve residents' physical and mental health.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar (use 'any' correctly, singular/plural agreement). If you have no specific park in mind, give a brief reason and optionally mention a general kind of park you might visit in future to enrich the answer.

例: Not really — I don't have a specific park in mind because I enjoy different kinds of parks. However, I would like to visit a botanical garden someday to see exotic plants and relax in a calm setting.

× Definitely, I like going to parks when I was in my childhood because I think that it make me physically fit and motivates for my next day and improve my mental thinking and makes me positive.

✓ Definitely, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I think that it made me physically fit, motivated me for the next day, improved my thinking, and made me more positive.

Mixed tense and subject-verb agreement errors: the speaker refers to past habit 'when I was a child' so verbs should be in past tense (liked, made, motivated, improved, made). 'Childhood' used with 'when I was in my childhood' is awkward; use 'when I was a child'. Parallel structure: maintain consistent verb forms and include objects/pronouns (motivated me). Use commas and 'and' to join list items. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yeah, of course I like going to parks now 'cause I need a particular break in my daily life schedule and going to park help me to think and how I can be a better next day and help me to be positive.

✓ Yes, of course I like going to parks now because I need a break in my daily schedule, and going to the park helps me think about how I can be better the next day and helps me stay positive.

Present tense and subject-verb agreement: for current habit use present simple, but 'going to park help' should be 'going to the park helps' (singular subject requires 'helps'). Use 'because' instead of slang ''cause'. Use articles: 'going to the park' and 'a break in my daily schedule'. Improve phrase 'think and how I can be a better next day' to 'think about how I can be better the next day'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Definitely, I like to see more park in my city because I think that every park has their own energy, own atmosphere that makes people motivate, makes both positive and help to gain knowledge and think on the future or anything.

✓ Definitely, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think that every park has its own energy and atmosphere that motivates people, makes them feel positive, and helps them gain knowledge and think about the future.

Singular/plural and pronoun agreement: 'more park' should be 'more parks'. 'Every park has their' should be 'every park has its' (every + singular takes singular pronoun). Verb forms and parallel structure: use 'motivates people, makes them feel positive, and helps them gain knowledge'. Preposition 'think on the future' should be 'think about the future'. Use conditional 'would like' to sound natural for preference. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× No, there are no any particular facts in my mind that I want to be there in the future because I think that every parks are special and gave atmosphere.

✓ No, there aren't any particular places in my mind that I want to visit in the future because I think that every park is special and has its own atmosphere.

Plural and article errors: 'no any' is incorrect; use 'aren't any' or 'no' + noun. 'Any particular facts' is wrong meaning; use 'any particular places'. 'I want to be there' should be 'I want to visit' for clarity. 'Every parks are' is wrong: 'every' requires singular noun and verb: 'every park is'. 'Gave atmosphere' is wrong verb and tense; use 'has its own atmosphere'. Grammar problem type ID: 1