Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn về thì và dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên; cần sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'wanted', 'go', 'when it was dry' không cần thiết), rút gọn để tránh dài dòng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ phù hợp.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my mother to exercise and with my father for morning walks, which helped me feel healthy and spend quality time with my family.

提案: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ('go in to my school', 'finish my decline' không đúng). Nên dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn và giải thích cụ thể tại sao bận (ví dụ: học, làm thêm) cùng với linking word như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

例: Not really, I don't go to parks much now because I am busy with university classes and a part-time job, so I usually don't have free time on weekends.

提案: Ý tốt nhưng ngôn ngữ cần chính xác và mạch lạc hơn; tránh câu vụn và lỗi số nhiều/ít ('more park' -> 'more parks'). Nên đưa một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể (môi trường, không khí, không gian giải trí) và dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example'.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide pleasant places for people to relax. For example, extra parks would reduce traffic pollution and offer safe spaces for families and exercise.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh thông tin lạc đề. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng ('nearly park' -> 'nearby park', 'frame or hot bearing' không rõ nghĩa). Nên nói rõ là không có công viên cụ thể, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao (tiện, gần nhà) cùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

例: I don't have any particular park in mind for the future. I usually prefer a nearby park because it's convenient and saves time, so I can exercise quickly before or after classes.

× Actually, when it was dry, I really want to going to the park because when I come into the park I can do a lot of exercise with my mom and in the morning I often walk around the park with my father.

✓ Actually, when it was dry, I really wanted to go to the park because when I went into the park I could do a lot of exercise with my mom and in the morning I often walked around the park with my father.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The context describes childhood, so past tense should be used consistently: 'want' -> 'wanted' (past), 'going' (incorrect verb form after want) -> use base form 'to go', 'come' -> 'went' (past), 'can' -> 'could' (past ability), 'walk' -> 'walked' (habit in the past). Suggestion: keep the past tense throughout when talking about past habits. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I really want to going to the park

✓ I really wanted to go to the park

After the verb 'want' you should use the full infinitive with to, not the -ing form. Also tense should match the past context: 'want' -> 'wanted'. Suggestion: use 'wanted to go'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× Personally I'm very busy now. I need to go in to my school, finish my decline and I have some part time job so I think now I'm very busy for going.

✓ Personally I'm very busy now. I need to go to my school, finish my studies and I have a part-time job so I think I'm too busy to go to the park now.

Several tense and word choice problems: 'go in to my school' -> 'go to my school'; 'finish my decline' is incorrect phrase for finishing studies -> use 'finish my studies' or 'finish my decline' is wrong; 'some part time job' -> 'a part-time job'; 'very busy for going' -> incorrect structure, use 'too busy to go'. Tense remains present. Suggestion: use correct collocations and infinitive after 'busy'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Definitely yes, because more park in my country.

✓ Definitely yes, because there should be more parks in my country.

Missing quantifier and plural form: 'more park' should be 'more parks'. Also the sentence needs 'there' to introduce existence ('there should be more parks') or 'there are more parks needed'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with quantifiers and include 'there' for existence statements. Grammar Problem Type ID: 14

× Actually in my city it can have the road and atmosphere more fresh because in the park the government will plan a lot of trees on there and that makes me so free.

✓ Actually, in my city the roads and atmosphere can be fresher because the government plants a lot of trees in the parks, and that makes me feel relaxed.

Awkward structure and incorrect use of 'can have'. Use 'roads' plural and comparative 'fresher'. 'Will plan a lot of trees on there' is incorrect: government 'plants a lot of trees in the parks'. 'Makes me so free' is unnatural; use 'feel relaxed' or 'feel free'. Also use consistent present tense for general facts. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations and prepositions ('plant in'). Grammar Problem Type ID: 3

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

The original sentence is mostly grammatical but 'want to' in this polite question is better as 'would like to'. No major article or plural error; this correction improves register. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for polite future desires. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I don't think so. Park have people do exercise, especially in the morning.

✓ I don't think so. Parks have people exercising, especially in the morning.

'Park have' is incorrect: use plural 'Parks have' or 'The park has'. Also collocation: 'people do exercise' -> 'people exercising' or 'people exercise'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use natural verb forms for ongoing activities. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× They can go jogging with the frame or hot bearing.

✓ They can go jogging with friends or with a group.

'Frame' and 'hot bearing' are incorrect word choices. Likely intended 'friends' or 'a group'. Also use appropriate nouns to convey meaning. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and collocations: 'go jogging with friends' or 'with a group'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× So I prefer going to a nearly park because it's very convenient, don't need to waste time.

✓ So I prefer going to a nearby park because it's very convenient and I don't need to waste time.

'Nearly park' is incorrect; use 'nearby park'. Also sentence lacks subject for 'don't need' — add 'I'. Use conjunction 'and' to connect clauses. Suggestion: use correct adverb/adjective 'nearby' and include subject in clauses. Grammar Problem Type ID: 13}]}} হলেও...