Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use clear simple sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct common errors: use past tense for childhood (liked/didn't like), say "I didn't have time" not "tie," and "I wasn't interested" instead of "I'm not interesting about it." Keep answers under five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t like going to parks as a child because I was always busy with school and after-school activities. For example, I often had homework and piano lessons, so I usually stayed home. Therefore, I rarely visited parks.

提案: Give a clear, natural response and avoid awkward phrases. Use present tense for current habits. Say "I don't" or "I rarely" and explain briefly. Use linking words (however, although) and correct collocations: "accompany him" or "go with him." Avoid conditional clutter; be concise.

例: Not really. I rarely go to parks because I prefer indoor activities like reading and cooking. However, if my partner wanted to go, I would gladly accompany him to spend time together.

提案: Acknowledge the benefit even if you don't use parks. Start with a clear statement, then give specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Use correct phrases: "public spaces," "fresh air," "relax." Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I would. Even though I don't personally use parks much, I think the city needs more public spaces because they give people fresh air and places to relax. For example, parents and students could use parks to exercise or read outdoors.

提案: Be specific about which parks or types of parks you'd like to visit and why. Use future tense correctly (I will visit / I would like to visit) and avoid vague phrases like "your program." Mention cultural interest clearly and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: If I travel abroad, I would like to visit famous city parks such as Hyde Park in London or Central Park in New York to learn about local culture and see how people spend their leisure time. Visiting those parks would help me understand daily life and meet local people.

× No, I don't. Like, I never go there because I have a lot of things to do in a day.

✓ No, I didn't. I never went there because I had a lot of things to do each day.

The question asks about childhood (past), so present tense 'don't' and 'never go' are incorrect. Use past simple 'didn't' and 'never went'. Also 'in a day' is better as 'each day' to indicate habitual past action.

× One one part is I don't have a tie.

✓ One reason is that I didn't have time.

The original has 'One one part' (redundant) and 'tie' is a misspelling for 'time'. This is a quantifier/word-choice error; correct to 'One reason is that I didn't have time' using past tense to match childhood context.

× Another part is that I'm not interest, I'm not interesting about it.

✓ Another reason is that I wasn't interested in it.

'Interest' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'interested' to describe the student's feelings. 'I'm not interesting' would mean the student is boring. Use past tense 'wasn't' for childhood.

× No, I think never. It's not my personality, so I think I would never have to do that.

✓ No, I don't think so. It's not my personality, so I don't think I would ever do that.

The student mixes tenses and uses unnatural phrasing. 'I think never' should be 'I don't think so'. 'Would never have to do that' implies obligation rather than preference; use 'would ever do that' to express preference. Maintain conditional present/future meaning.

× If I have a husband, if you like to go, maybe I will accompany with him, but it's not my desire.

✓ If I have a husband and he likes to go, maybe I will accompany him, but it's not my desire.

Fix modal/conditional structure: combine conditions with 'and', use 'he likes' (third person) and 'accompany him' (no preposition 'with' after accompany). Keep 'maybe I will' to express future possibility.

× Yeah, of course even I don't like to do that, but it's the public area for people to relax and to to read the same fresh to be a fresh air and they can do something they don't want to, they don't want to.

✓ Yeah, of course I don't like to do that, but parks are public areas where people can relax, read, and enjoy the fresh air.

Multiple errors: unnecessary 'even', repeated words, awkward phrasing. Use plural 'parks' and 'public areas', correct structure 'where people can...' and 'enjoy the fresh air'. Remove repetitions and clarify activities.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It uses appropriate preposition 'to' with 'go' and matches future reference.

× Umm, maybe if I visit to other countries, I think I would try to visit your program.

✓ Maybe if I visit other countries, I would try to visit your city.

Remove incorrect preposition 'to' after 'visit'. 'Visit your program' is unclear; likely 'your city' or 'your country' fits. Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical future. Keep present simple 'visit' for the condition.

× I wanna learn about their culture and their people, so I will try that I think.

✓ I want to learn about their culture and people, so I will try to do that.

Use formal 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna'. Remove redundant 'their' before 'people' (optional), and fix word order to 'try to do that'. 'I think' at end is unnecessary; include only if hedging is intended.