Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar (verb forms and articles) and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family because my father liked jogging while my mother and I had picnics in the park. Those visits were relaxing and I remember playing on the swings near the pond.

提案: Watch word choice and collocation (use 'nowadays' not 'now a day') and simplify structure. Use a linking word to connect ideas and correct verb forms. Provide one specific example of routine or frequency.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Nowadays my partner and I go jogging there twice a week, and afterward we often have a small picnic by the lake, which helps us relax together.

提案: Improve grammar (singular/plural, conditionals) and clarity. Avoid fillers like 'umm'. Give a specific reason and example, use linking words such as 'however' or 'because'.

例: Yes. Although my city has parks such as Lumpini Park in Bangkok, I would like to see more small parks in residential areas because they would make green space more accessible for families and for people who cannot travel far.

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct tense usage. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific plan or reason. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'for the next time'.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I was in New York in April but missed it, so next time I plan to spend an afternoon there to explore its paths and see how big it really is.

× My father like to go jogging and left me and my mom doing some picnic in the park area.

✓ My father likes to go jogging and left my mom and me having a picnic in the park.

Subject-verb agreement: 'father' is third person singular so the verb should be 'likes' (ID 2). Also pronoun order and verb form were awkward: use 'my mom and me' (object pronouns) and 'having a picnic' (correct gerund phrase). Suggest learning subject-verb agreement rules and common collocations like 'have/hold a picnic'.

× Yes, and interestingly I usually go to the park with my partner to jog now a day and also we spend some time to having some picnic.

✓ Yes, interestingly I usually go to the park with my partner to jog nowadays, and we also spend some time having a picnic.

Adverb and verb form issues: 'now a day' should be 'nowadays' (ID 6). 'spend some time to having' is incorrect; use 'spend some time having' or 'spend some time to have' depending on structure; here 'having' is correct. Suggest practicing common time adverbials and verb patterns after 'spend time'.

× Yes, actually there are some parks in my cities, like in Bangkok for example, Lumpy Park.

✓ Yes, actually there are some parks in my city, like Lumpini Park in Bangkok for example.

Pluralization and proper noun/location: 'cities' is incorrect when referring to a single city where the speaker lives; use 'my city' (ID 1). Also the park name was misspelled and word order improved: 'Lumpini Park in Bangkok'. Suggest checking count nouns to match context and verifying proper names.

× However I think if there is more park in the country so umm the people in my city would be more accessible to the park.

✓ However, I think if there were more parks in the country, the people in my city would have better access to them.

Conditional and 'there is' usage: 'if there is more park' is incorrect. For hypothetical situations use plural 'parks' and subjunctive/conditional 'if there were' (ID 3). Also 'would be more accessible to the park' is incorrect phrasing — use 'would have better access to them' or 'would be more able to access parks'. Suggest studying conditional structures and collocations like 'have access to'.

× Yes. The funny thing is that I went to New York in April and I missed the opportunity to go to the Central Park, which for the next time I would like to be there to see how large it is.

✓ Yes. The funny thing is that I went to New York in April and missed the opportunity to go to Central Park; next time I would like to be there to see how large it is.

Tense and article use: 'I missed' is fine but avoid redundant 'I' before 'missed' (stylistic). 'the Central Park' is incorrect — use 'Central Park' without 'the' (ID 22/17); combined sentence improved for clarity. 'for the next time' should be 'next time'. Suggest reviewing article usage with proper nouns and concise past-tense narration.