Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary filler like "and," use correct verb forms and prepositions, and provide one specific supporting detail. For example, mention a particular activity you enjoyed and use linking words if adding detail.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I spent many afternoons climbing trees and playing tag with neighborhood friends, so parks were my favorite place to relax and have fun.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar: avoid starting with "And," use correct verb forms and provide a brief reason to support your view. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail if needed and use a linking word when adding explanation.

例: Not really. I prefer spending time in cafés now because I enjoy meeting friends and working on my laptop in a quieter, more comfortable environment.

提案: Respond clearly to the question with a direct stance, avoid hesitations and plural/singular errors ("a governments"), and give a specific reason. Use linking words like "because" or "however" to make your point coherent, and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe outdoor spaces where children can play and learn. For example, new parks with playgrounds and benches would encourage families to spend more time outside.

提案: Give a clear and direct answer, correct awkward phrasing, and provide a brief specific reason or an alternative. Avoid fillers like "uh" and be concise—one sentence plus one supporting detail if necessary.

例: Not at the moment; I feel parks are more enjoyable for children, and I usually prefer visiting cafés or museums. However, I would consider going to a botanical garden if there was a special exhibition.

× And when I was a child, I adored spend my time in there so I would love it.

✓ And when I was a child, I adored spending my time there, so I loved it.

The verb 'adore' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), not the base form 'spend'. Also 'in there' is incorrect; use 'there'. 'Would love it' is inappropriate for a past habitual statement; use the past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: use 'adored spending' and keep past tense consistency.

× And no, I really want spend my time in the cafes.

✓ No, I really want to spend my time in cafes.

After 'want' the verb should be in the infinitive form 'to spend'. Remove the article 'the' before 'cafes' unless referring to specific cafes. Also beginning 'And no' is unnecessary; 'No' is sufficient.

× And in my opinion, a governments can't uh, do more parks for the child, uh, due to children have a good time with their.

✓ In my opinion, the government can't build more parks for children because children need places to have a good time.

Multiple errors: 'a governments' mixes singular article with plural noun; choose 'the government' (singular) or 'governments' (plural) without 'a'. 'Do more parks' is unnatural; use 'build more parks'. 'For the child' should be 'for children' (plural, general). The clause 'due to children have a good time with their' is ungrammatical—use 'because children need places to have a good time' or similar. Suggestions: fix article/noun agreement, use appropriate verb collocation ('build parks'), and rephrase the reason clause with 'because' + clause.

× And in my opinion, a governments can't uh, do more parks for the child, uh, due to children have a good time with their.

✓ In my opinion, the government can't build more parks for children because children need places to have a good time.

The modal 'can't' is fine, but the following clause 'due to children have a good time with their' mixes structures and tenses. Use a clear present-tense reason: 'because children need places to have a good time.' Ensure subject-verb agreement (children need) and a complete object ('places').

× Uh, I don't really want to go right now in the parks because parks are more beneficial for children.

✓ I don't really want to go to parks right now because parks are more beneficial for children.

Use the infinitive 'to go to' with the correct preposition 'to' (not 'in'). 'Right now' placement is fine but put 'to parks' together. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; it uses the present simple appropriately. Suggestion: 'I don't really want to go to parks right now because they are more beneficial for children.' to avoid repetition of 'parks'.