Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often went there with my mother to play on the swings and enjoy the fresh air, which made me very happy.

提案: Use correct verb forms and combine ideas to avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and a specific activity, linked logically. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for exercise. For instance, I usually go running there twice a week to stay fit and relax.

提案: Be precise and correct plural/singular forms. State your opinion clearly, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' health. For example, in Bangkok there are several parks, and I would enjoy having more small parks within walking distance of my home.

提案: Provide a full sentence with a clear topic sentence and a brief supporting detail. Specify which park or what you would do there and use correct prepositions and articles.

例: Yes, I plan to visit the small community park near my house because it has a new playground and a walking trail where I can exercise and meet neighbors.

× Yes, I like to going to the park when I was young and I really like the weather in this park and go to the park with my mom and she said she calling me a lot. I I'm so happy.

✓ 'Yes, I liked going to the park when I was young. I really liked the weather there and I went to the park with my mom, and she said she called me a lot. I was so happy.'

'Errors: mixing present tense (like) with past time reference (when I was young); incorrect verb form "to going" (should be gerund without to) and incorrect continuous form "she calling". Also redundant and run-on structure. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past habits: use "liked" and "went"; use correct verb forms: "going" (gerund) not "to going", and "she called" for simple past. Break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences.'

× Yes, of course. I really like go to the park. I like when I'm go to the park. I'm do the exercise or running for exercising.

✓ 'Yes, of course. I really like going to the park. I like it when I go to the park. I exercise there or go running.'

'Errors: incorrect verb forms after like (use gerund "going"), incorrect contraction/context "I'm go" should be simple present "I go", wrong auxiliary "I'm do" should be simple present "I do" or just "I exercise", and awkward phrase "running for exercising". Suggestion: Use gerunds after like, use simple present for habitual actions, and simplify to "I exercise" or "go running".'

× Yes I would like to see more parks in my cities like Bangkok's and the Bangkok city is have many park in here and I want to go to every park in this here.

✓ 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, like Bangkok. Bangkok has many parks, and I want to visit every park there.'

'Errors: incorrect plural "cities" when referring to one city, possessive misuse "Bangkok's" unnecessary, incorrect verb phrase "is have" (should be "has"), and plural noun agreement "many park" should be "many parks". Also awkward "in this here". Suggestion: Use singular/plural consistently (city vs cities, parks), use correct verb "has" for possession, and use natural locative phrasing "there" or "in my city".'

× Park in the near my house.

✓ 'There is a park near my house.'

'Errors: missing subject and incorrect word order "in the near my house". Use existential construction or simple subject-verb order. Suggestion: Use "There is" for existence and correct prepositional phrase "near my house".'