Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然和有条理。先直接回答“喜欢”并给出简洁原因，然后用一到两句具体细节支持（如常做的活动或感受）。注意语法和词汇的准确性，避免模糊或不正确的表达。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed trees with my friends, which made me feel free and happy.

提案: 回答已经比较完整，要注意把句子分成短句以保持自然流畅，同时使用连接词使结构更清晰。可以再加一两个具体细节（例如常去的时间或做的活动）来丰富内容，但不要超出五句。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I feel tired from studying. I usually take a leisurely walk in the evening and sit on a bench to relax, because the fresh air and greenery help me recharge.

提案: 回答含义不清且语法错误较多。先直接回答“愿意”，然后用连贯的句子说明原因（工业污染、需要绿地等），并给出具体影响或好处。注意句子完整和词序，避免断句或不当词汇。

例: Yes, definitely. My city has many factories that cause air pollution, so more parks would improve air quality and give residents places to relax.

提案: 回答要更简洁并用更准确的表达。先回答不确定或给偏好，再用一两句说明理由和具体偏好（例如安静的场所、有座位或花园）。避免双重否定和模糊表达。

例: I'm not sure, because many parks here are similar. However, I would prefer a park with a quiet atmosphere, plenty of seating and shaded areas so I can relax away from noise.

× Yes, because it's very innocent our lives to go outside to play and park is a good place for us.

✓ Yes, because it's very peaceful for our lives to go outside to play, and parks are good places for us.

句子中使用了“innocent”来描述生活，这里更自然的词是“peaceful”（平静/宁静）。此外，结构混乱：需要使用介词短语“for our lives”来说明受影响的对象；并且“park is a good place”应使用复数“parks are good places”以匹配泛指的公园。建议用更恰当的形容词并调整句子结构，使主语和谓语搭配一致。

× Yes, I still enjoy going to parks while I feel tired after study, I often visit a nearby park to take a leisurely walk and unwind because the fresh air and greenery help me recharge.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I feel tired after studying, I often visit a nearby park to take a leisurely walk and unwind, because the fresh air and greenery help me recharge.

原句是一个run-on sentence（逗号拼接多个独立分句），需要分句或用连接词并调整动名词形式。把“after study”改为正确的动名词短语“after studying”，并将两个独立句用句号或连词分开以提高可读性。

× Yes, definitely, because the say they well I lived have many industries which is. Create many dust. More and more parks via observed dust which gives me fresh air.

✓ Yes, definitely, because the area where I live has many industries that create a lot of dust. I want more parks because they give me fresh air.

原句严重结构混乱，多处片段无法连贯。需要重组为两句：第一句说明居住地区有许多制造灰尘的工业，使用正确的关系从句“the area where I live has many industries that create a lot of dust”；第二句表达想要更多公园以获得新鲜空气。“create many dust”应改为“create a lot of dust”或“produce much dust”。避免无意义的词序和碎句。

× I'm not sure because most parks are the same in my city and have a little differences, but I would prefer parks that have a quiet environment because I can not avoid too much noise.

✓ I'm not sure because most parks in my city are the same and have only small differences, but I would prefer parks that have a quiet environment because I cannot tolerate too much noise.

原句中“have a little differences”不符合搭配，应使用“have only small differences”或“have little difference”。另外，“can not avoid too much noise”意思不清，改为“cannot tolerate too much noise”（无法忍受过多噪音）更贴切。注意“cannot”通常写作一个词。