Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect prepositions (use 'visit parks' or 'go to parks').

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were exciting places to explore. For example, I often played on the swings with my siblings and had picnics with my family, which made those outings memorable.

提案: Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example linked with 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For instance, I often sit and watch children playing, which lifts my mood, and when I have free time I explore new trails or garden areas.

提案: Give a direct answer then support with specific reasons and correct grammar (singular/plural agreement). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to organize ideas.

例: Definitely. More parks would benefit the city because they provide playgrounds for children and walking paths for morning and evening exercisers. For example, new parks could include seating areas and exercise equipment that encourage socializing and healthy habits.

提案: Be direct and specific. Avoid filler phrases like 'to be honest' twice. If you don't have a specific park, say so and then mention the type of park features you would like to see. Use conditional correctly ('I would visit').

例: I don't have a particular park in mind at the moment, but if I get the chance I would love to visit any park with new features. For example, I'd like to explore parks with modern play equipment, themed gardens, or interactive art installations.

× Yes, I really love to visit in parks because it's more exciting place to call myself and spend quality time with my family, friends.

✓ Yes, I really loved visiting parks because they were a more exciting place to be and I could spend quality time with my family and friends.

Incorrect use of infinitive with preposition and gerund: 'love to visit in parks' should be 'loved visiting parks' to use the gerund after 'love' when talking about habitual past actions; 'more exciting place to call myself' is ungrammatical and should be rephrased as 'a more exciting place to be'; 'friends' needs 'and' and plural agreement. Suggest using gerund after 'love' for general/habitual activities and rephrasing awkward expressions. Grammar type ID: 8

× Apart from that, sometimes I feel very alone so I go.

✓ Apart from that, sometimes I feel very lonely, so I go to the park.

Awkward and incomplete phrasing: 'feel very alone' is acceptable but 'feel very lonely' is more natural; the sentence lacks the destination 'to the park'. Add a comma before 'so'. Suggest explicitly stating where you go to make the sentence complete. Grammar type ID: 26

× I prefer to go park to enjoy with the children.

✓ I prefer to go to the park to enjoy time with the children.

Missing preposition 'to' before 'park' and awkward phrase 'enjoy with the children'. Use 'go to the park' and 'enjoy time with the children' for correct preposition and noun use. Grammar type ID: 11

× Yes, it's a really good way to keep calm and sit there, watch some some children to play which give me a really positive vibes.

✓ Yes, it's a really good way to stay calm and sit there and watch some children play, which gives me really positive vibes.

Multiple tense and form issues: 'keep calm' is acceptable but 'stay calm' is more natural; 'watch some some children to play' should be 'watch some children play' (bare infinitive after 'watch'); 'which give' must agree with singular noun phrase 'which gives'; 'a really positive vibes' mixes article and plural — use 'really positive vibes' or 'a really positive feeling'. Remove duplicate 'some'. Grammar type ID: 6

× However, sometimes I have a free time so I go to the park to explore new things.

✓ However, sometimes I have free time, so I go to the park to explore new things.

Incorrect article: 'a free time' is wrong because 'time' is an uncountable noun here; use 'free time' without an article. Also add a comma before 'so'. Grammar type ID: 22

× Definitely because parks provides many facilities such as playground for the children or walking area for the people who like to walk in the morning and evening.

✓ Definitely, because parks provide many facilities such as playgrounds for children and walking areas for people who like to walk in the morning and evening.

Subject-verb disagreement: 'parks provides' should be 'parks provide'. Also pluralize 'playground' and 'walking area' to match 'parks' and remove unnecessary articles; use 'for children' not 'for the children' for general statement. Grammar type ID: 27

× As well as some couples spend quality time in parks, so it's really appreciable.

✓ Also, some couples spend quality time in parks, so it is really admirable.

'As well as' is misused to start the sentence; use 'Also' or 'Additionally'. 'Appreciable' is incorrect in this context — use 'admirable' or 'appreciated'. Simplify sentence structure and avoid comma misuse. Grammar type ID: 13

× To be honest, honest I am not considerate about these thing.

✓ To be honest, I am not very sure about these things.

Redundant word 'honest' repeated and incorrect adjective 'considerate' used instead of 'sure' or 'certain'; 'these thing' should be plural 'these things'. Rephrase to a natural expression: 'not very sure about these things'. Grammar type ID: 26

× If I get a chance in future definitely I visit and explore the new innovation and other thing which newly added in the park.

✓ If I get a chance in the future, I will definitely visit and explore the new innovations and other things that have been newly added to the park.

Incorrect future tense and verb forms: after a conditional 'If I get a chance in the future' use 'I will visit' not 'I visit'. Pluralize 'innovation' and 'thing'. Use present perfect passive 'have been newly added' to indicate recent additions, and correct preposition 'added to the park'. Add commas for clarity. Grammar type ID: 7