Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, prepositions and pronouns (e.g., “I liked…”, “with my mum and dad”, “play with my friend”). Avoid unnecessary or unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. For example, I used to visit the park with my mum and dad every weekend, and I often played games with my friends there. This was one of my favourite ways to spend time outdoors.

提案: Give a concise direct answer, then explain with specific reasons. Use correct tense and smoother linking phrases (e.g., “It depends on whether I have free time because…”). Avoid repetition and filler words. Mention concrete activities that prevent you from going if relevant.

例: It depends — I only go to parks when I have free time. At the moment I have a lot of homework and other responsibilities in Mexico, so I usually don’t have time to visit parks during the week.

提案: Answer directly and explain with clear, appropriate reasons. Correct singular/plural forms and word choice (e.g., “parks” not “park”, avoid saying “shooting” if you mean activities or people—use precise nouns). Use linking words like “because” and give a specific benefit or memory.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for families to relax. When I visit a park, I am reminded of my childhood, which makes these spaces valuable for the community.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and add specific examples of the parks you want to visit. Use correct prepositions and plural/singular forms (e.g., “parks in different countries”, “national parks and wildlife reserves”). Explain why with concrete details and use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I would like to visit parks in other countries, especially national parks and wildlife reserves. For example, I hope to see a rainforest reserve in Costa Rica because it would be peaceful and full of wildlife, very different from the parks in my country.

× Just when I was young, I like to visit the park with my mum and dad and I always to pay to my friend.

✓ When I was young, I liked to visit the park with my mum and dad and I always paid for my friend.

The student mixes past context with present-tense verbs. 'When I was young' requires past tense: use 'liked' not 'like'. 'Always to pay to my friend' is incorrect: use past simple 'paid' and correct preposition 'for'. Improve by matching tense to the time reference and using correct verb patterns and prepositions.

× It depend on I have free time to visit the park because uh, in Mexico I need to do homework and a lot of work to do a lot of things to do.

✓ It depends on whether I have free time to visit the park because in Mexico I need to do homework and many other things.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure errors: after 'It' use 'depends' (third-person singular). The clause should use 'whether I have' instead of 'I have'. Also 'a lot of work to do a lot of things to do' is redundant; replace with 'many other things'. Improve by using correct subject-verb agreement and clearer clause connectors.

× Yes, I would like to see more park today because when I go to park I see so many shooting and it remind me when I was young.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because when I go to parks I see a lot of shootings and it reminds me of when I was young.

Several errors: 'more park' should be plural 'more parks'. Use consistent noun phrases: 'in my city' fits the question. 'When I go to park' requires article/plural: 'go to parks'. 'So many shooting' needs plural 'shootings' or 'so much shooting' depending on meaning; here use 'a lot of shootings'. 'It remind' should be 'it reminds' (third-person singular). Also add 'of' after 'reminds me'. Improve by making nouns plural where needed and matching verb agreement.

× Well, I would like to visit park in different county. I want to see national and wildlife and because it's so peaceful and different from my country.

✓ Well, I would like to visit parks in different countries. I want to see national parks and wildlife because they are so peaceful and different from my country.

Plural and article errors: 'visit park' should be 'visit parks' and 'different county' should be 'different countries'. 'National and wildlife' is incomplete; use 'national parks and wildlife'. Pronoun agreement: use 'they are' to refer to parks and wildlife. Improve by pluralizing countable nouns, using correct noun phrases, and matching pronouns to their antecedents.