Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and provide one specific supporting detail. Keep your answer to 2–3 sentences and use linking words if needed.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I used to visit the park with my family and friends every weekend, and we often played football or had picnics there, which I really enjoyed.

提案: Clarify your meaning, use correct tense and vocabulary, and avoid hesitations. Begin with a direct statement about whether you still go to parks, then give a clear reason using one or two supporting details and linking words.

例: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I am busy with my studies, so I spend most of my free time practicing English and attending classes.

提案: Make your position clear and use accurate vocabulary. State whether you would like more parks, then explain why with a specific reason (e.g., health, leisure). Avoid repetition and correct word choice (e.g., 'many parks', 'unavailable').

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are few green spaces now. More parks would give people places to exercise and relax, especially families with children.

提案: Be specific about the park and give a reason or plan. Use future tense correctly and combine ideas into one or two clear sentences. Mention the park's name or features to make your answer concrete.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Central Garden, the most famous park in our city, because it has large lakes and botanical gardens. I hope to go there next summer with my family to relax and take photos.

× Yes I like but when I was child and I went to the park with my friend and with and family every weekend and I enjoyed a lot of it.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I went to the park with my friends and family every weekend and I enjoyed it a lot.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'I like' used with past timeframe 'when I was a child'; missing article before 'child'; plural forms 'friend' and 'family' need adjustment; awkward word order. Suggestions: Use past tense 'liked' for past habitual actions, add the article 'a' before 'child', pluralize 'friend' to 'friends' if referring to more than one, and place 'a lot' after the verb phrase 'enjoyed it' for natural word order.

× Currently, I would not put partake because I am I am I am busy now with I am busy because I am steady in class, pragmatic. That's why I am Peter practice always listening, speaking and I.

✓ Currently, I do not take part because I am busy with my studies. I am focused in class, so I am always practicing listening and speaking.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'would not put partake' and wrong verb 'put partake'; repetition and sentence fragments; incorrect noun 'steady in class, pragmatic'; wrong word order 'practice always listening, speaking and I'. Suggestions: Use the correct phrase 'do not take part' for present inability, simplify and combine ideas into complete sentences, use 'busy with my studies' or 'busy in class', and order activities as 'practicing listening and speaking'.

× I would like to visit a many parks in my city but when when I was a child I visited a lot of it but now it's unable unavailable for visiting.

✓ I would like to visit many parks in my city. When I was a child I visited a lot of them, but now they are not available to visit.

Errors: incorrect article 'a many parks' (mix of 'a' and 'many'); repetition 'when when'; incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'parks'; wrong adjective 'unable unavailable'. Suggestions: Remove 'a' before 'many', use 'them' for plural reference, correct repetition, and say 'they are not available to visit' or 'they are unavailable'.

× Yes, I want to go a famous well known park in our city and I will visit it in my future.

✓ Yes, I want to go to a famous, well-known park in our city and I will visit it in the future.

Errors: missing preposition 'to' after 'go'; article usage should be 'a famous, well-known park' with hyphenated compound adjective; phrase 'in my future' is incorrect. Suggestions: Use 'go to', include the article 'a', hyphenate 'well-known' as a compound adjective, and use 'in the future' for general future plans.