Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤り、時制の不一致、冗長さがあります。まず、過去の習慣を述べる場合は過去形（preferred, spent）を使い、接続や追加説明には接続詞（because, so）や副詞句を正しく使いましょう。また、文を2〜3文にまとめ、話の流れを明確にするために短いトピック文＋具体的な理由を示す構成にしてください。例：トピック文（I didn't really like going to parks.）→ 理由（I preferred staying at home because I loved drawing and reading.）→ 補足（I usually spent most of my free time doing those activities.）

例: I didn't really like going to parks as a child. I preferred staying at home because I loved drawing and reading. I usually spent most of my free time doing those activities.

提案: 良い進歩を示しています。現在の好みと理由を述べていますが、文法（daughter loves）、語の反復（parks）を減らし、接続詞を使って自然に繋げるとより効果的です。1〜3文で簡潔に語り、具体的な活動（walking, playing）を加えると内容が豊かになります。

例: I do like going to the park now because my daughter loves it. We often go together to walk, play on the swings and enjoy the relaxed atmosphere.

提案: 回答は短く理由を述べていますが、表現が不自然で文法の誤り（outside is so hot, we don't need more park）があります。提案に対する意見表明→理由説明の順で、具体的な理由（heat, maintenance, usage）を示してください。また、否定を言う場合は代替案（improve existing parks）を加えると印象が良くなります。

例: I don't think we need more parks in the city. It already has several parks, and because the weather is often very hot, people don't use outdoor spaces much; it would be better to improve the existing parks instead.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、発話に躊躇（uh）が多く、文法と語順の誤り（a little park with a pool, near my convenience → near my house/convenience store）があります。未来の予定を述べる際はwill/plan toやwant to goを使い、理由を簡潔に付け加えてください。語の繰り返しを避け、具体的な場所の表現を正しくしましょう。

例: Yes. There is a small park with a pool near my house that I want to visit. I plan to take my daughters there because they enjoy swimming.

× Not really. When I was a child I prefer staying home.

✓ Not really. When I was a child I preferred staying at home.

The speaker refers to a past habitual preference, so the past tense 'preferred' is required instead of the present 'prefer'; also use the preposition 'at' with 'home'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits (e.g., 'I preferred staying at home').

× This is because I loved drawing and reading books so I spend the most my time or at home.

✓ This is because I loved drawing and reading books, so I spent most of my time at home.

Several issues: the action is in the past so use past simple 'spent' not 'spend'; 'most of my time' is the correct quantifier and word order; use 'at home' not 'or at home'. Suggestion: Use 'spent most of my time at home' to describe past duration correctly.

× Now I love going to the park because my daughter love her parks, so we often go to parks and enjoy the atmosphere.

✓ Now I love going to the park because my daughter loves parks, so we often go to parks and enjoy the atmosphere.

When the subject is third person singular ('my daughter'), the verb needs an -s in the present simple: 'loves' not 'love'. Also 'her parks' is unnatural; 'loves parks' is clearer. Suggestion: Add -s for third person singular in present simple verbs.

× I don't think so because there are other parks in the city.

✓ I don't think so because there are enough parks in the city.

The original sentence is grammatical, but to convey the intended meaning (no need for more parks) it is better to say 'there are enough parks'. This uses 'there are' correctly to state existence. Suggestion: Use 'there are enough parks' to clearly express sufficiency.

× In addition, outside is so hot so we don't need more park.

✓ In addition, it is so hot outside, so we don't need more parks.

Word order: 'it is hot outside' is natural; 'park' should be plural 'parks' to match 'more'. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Say 'it is so hot outside' and use plural when referring to additional countable items ('more parks').

× Yes, there are, uh, little park with pool is located near my convenience.

✓ Yes, there is a small park with a pool located near my convenience store.

Use singular 'there is' for one park; 'little park' should be 'a small park'; include articles 'a pool' and correct noun 'convenience store' if intended. 'Located' follows noun without extra 'is' if rephrased. Suggestion: Use 'There is a small park with a pool located near the convenience store.'

× So I want to go there with my daughters because my daughters like uh, uh, swimming.

✓ So I want to go there with my daughters because my daughters like swimming.

The sentence is fine except filler words 'uh, uh' should be removed. 'Daughters' is plural so 'like' is correct. Keep 'like swimming' (gerund) to express preference. Suggestion: Remove fillers and keep 'like swimming' to state hobby.