Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için basit zaman uyumuna, artikellerin kullanımına ve kelime sırasına dikkat etmelisiniz. Kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından bağlantı sözcükleriyle (for example, because) destekleyici ayrıntı verin. Ayrıca tekil/çoğul uyumuna (a park / parks, a child / when I was a child) ve fiil çekimlerine (we went / we played) dikkat edin.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because I had many friends there and we often played games together.

提案: Olumsuz cevap verirken daha net bir konu cümlesi kullanın ve ardından sebebi bağlaçlarla açıklayın. Ayrıca duygu ifadelerinde doğru sıfat ve yardımcı fiil kullanımına (I feel, I am) dikkat edin. Cümleleri kısa ve birbirine bağlayıcı ifadelerle düzenleyin (however, but, because).

例: Not really; however, when I see a park I feel happy and relaxed because I can hear birds and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

提案: Cevabı doğrudan verin, ardından sebep gösterin. Tekil/çoğul ve artikelleri düzeltin (a lot of parks, I am happy about this). Ayrıca neden daha fazla parka ihtiyaç olduğunu açık ve spesifik örneklerle verin. Bağlaçlar (because, so) kullanın.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because although we have many parks, more green spaces would give children safer places to play and help residents relax.

提案: Bu soruya cevap verirken gelecekle ilgili net bir plan veya tercih ifade edin (I would like to visit...). Cümle yapısını basitleştirin ve tekrarları kaldırın. Spesifik detaylar verin: hangi özelliklere sahip parklar (lots of trees, flower beds, picnic areas) ve ne yapmayı planladığınızı (have a picnic, play cards) açıklayın.

例: In the future I would like to visit parks designed for adults with lots of trees, flower beds and picnic areas where I can relax and maybe play cards with friends.

× Yes, I like it going to the parks when I child because I had many friends and we going to parks and we played game.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I had many friends and we went to parks and played games.

The student mixes present and past tenses and omits auxiliary verbs. Use past tense 'liked' and 'was' for childhood. Use past simple 'went' for actions in the past and plural 'games'. Improve by keeping consistent past tense: 'I liked', 'I was', 'we went', 'we played games'. Errors: incorrect present tense 'like' instead of past 'liked' (Present tense issue), missing 'was' after 'I' (Sentence structure), 'we going' needs past 'we went' (Past tense), 'played game' should be plural 'played games' (Singular and plural issue). Please focus on consistent tense and correct verb forms.

× Not actually, but I see a park, I feel happy and relaxed and I hear birds or any animal. I'm feel peaceful.

✓ Not really; but when I see a park I feel happy and relaxed and I hear birds or other animals. I feel peaceful.

Mixes present simple with incorrect contractions and word choice. Use 'Not really' for negation. Use 'when I see' with present simple for general truth. 'Any animal' is incorrect; use 'other animals'. 'I'm feel' is ungrammatical; use 'I feel'. Improve by using correct adverb 'really', correct clause connector 'when', and proper verb forms.

× We have a lot of park and we happy for this. But yes I like to see more park in my city. We need park for feel peaceful and happy for children.

✓ We have a lot of parks and we are happy about this. But yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. We need parks so children can feel peaceful and happy.

Incorrect use or omission of articles and plural forms. 'a lot of park' should be plural 'a lot of parks'. Missing verb 'are' in 'we are happy'. 'Like to see more park' should be 'see more parks'. Use 'so children can...' instead of 'for feel'. Improve by pluralizing countable nouns and adding necessary verbs and connectors, and using correct infinitive or modal structures.

× I would like going to a park for adults and I I went to see more green plus and maybe flowers, maybe fruits, trees and goods play cards.

✓ I would like to go to a park for adults where I can see more greenery and maybe flowers, fruit trees, and enjoy playing cards.

After 'would like' use the base verb 'to go', not the -ing form. 'I went' is past and incorrect here; use 'where I can see' for future desire. 'Green plus' is incorrect; use 'greenery'. 'Maybe fruits, trees' should be 'fruit trees'. 'Goods play cards' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy playing cards'. Improve by using 'would like to + base verb', 'can' for ability/possibility, and correct noun phrases.