Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and add a clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and long awkward phrasing.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to visit a small park near my home almost every day because playing on the swings and watching the birds helped me relax and forget about schoolwork.

提案: Give a clear main sentence and one specific supporting detail; fix grammar and reduce redundancy. Use linking words (for example, because or so) to connect reasons and be precise about frequency or activities.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my friends. For example, we often go on weekends to have a picnic and play football, which is a great way to relax after a busy week.

提案: Provide a direct opinion and one or two specific reasons; correct vocabulary (park, visit) and avoid repeated phrases. Use linking words to structure the answer and mention concrete benefits of more parks.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and improve air quality. For instance, parks with flower gardens and walking paths encourage families to exercise and enjoy nature.

提案: Answer directly naming the park, then give a specific reason why you want to visit and when or how. Correct grammar (articles, word order) and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Rudwa National Park in India because I have heard it has diverse wildlife and beautiful landscapes. I hope to go there next year to see the animals and take photographs.

× Yes definitely whenever child I have I visit a park everyday to make my mind refresh.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I visited a park every day to refresh my mind.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order ('whenever child I have I visit'), wrong tense for childhood (use past simple 'was', 'visited'), article and determiner missing ('a child' -> 'a child' fixed by 'when I was a child'), 'everyday' used as adjective should be 'every day' as adverb, and awkward phrase 'make my mind refresh' should be 'refresh my mind'. Suggestion: use clear clause order (When I was a child, I visited...), use past simple for habitual past actions, and use 'every day' as two words for frequency.

× Yes, definitely. I still like going to park with my friend and enjoy the moment whenever I have a. Whenever I have a quality of time, I only prefer to spend with my friend.

✓ Yes, definitely. I still like going to the park with my friends and enjoying the moment whenever I have free time. When I have free time, I prefer to spend it with my friends.

Errors: missing definite article before 'park' (use 'the park') — article error (17); incorrect singular/plural 'friend' should be 'friends' if general (1); awkward verb forms and parallelism: 'like going... and enjoy' should be 'like going... and enjoying' to match gerund form (8/10); 'whenever I have a.' is incomplete and 'quality of time' is incorrect collocation — use 'free time' and include object 'it' after 'spend'. Suggestion: maintain parallel gerund structures, use correct articles, choose correct collocation 'free time', and keep number agreement.

× Yes definitely I like to see more part in my city like Divya National Park and many more and I also visited in in several type of parks in my city and I watch the natural, I know the natural world, colourful flowers and many more.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city, such as Divya National Park, and I have visited several types of parks in my city. I enjoy seeing nature, the colorful flowers, and many other natural things.

Problems: 'see more part' should be 'see more parks' (singular/plural and word choice); 'like' used awkwardly — use 'such as' for examples; 'visited in in' duplicate preposition and wrong preposition — use 'visited' without 'in' or 'visited several parks'; 'several type of parks' should be 'several types of parks' (pluralization); 'I watch the natural, I know the natural world' is ungrammatical — use 'I enjoy seeing nature' or 'I know about the natural world' depending on meaning; 'colourful' -> 'colorful' (spelling variant acceptable). Suggestion: use correct plural forms, remove extra prepositions, use 'such as' for examples, and choose clear verbs like 'visit' and 'enjoy'.

× Yes, definitely that is one part. It is my favorite park is Rudwa National Park. It is located in the India and I I want to visit that place in my in future.

✓ Yes, definitely. My favorite park is Rudwa National Park. It is located in India, and I want to visit that place in the future.

Errors: redundant and confusing phrases: 'that is one part' unclear and unnecessary; 'It is my favorite park is Rudwa...' is a double verb phrase — choose one: 'My favorite park is...'; incorrect article 'the India' — countries like India do not use 'the' (article error); repeated word 'I I'; 'in my in future' should be 'in the future' (article and word order). Suggestion: simplify sentences, remove redundant words, use 'in the future' for future time expressions, and omit 'the' before country names like India.