Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: những hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên, tần suất, cảm xúc). Tránh câu không rõ nghĩa và lỗi ngữ pháp (thay “I bicycle” bằng “I rode a bicycle”). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản như “and”, “so”, “because” để làm rõ ý, giới hạn tối đa 4-5 câu. Ví dụ cải thiện: nêu rõ bạn thích hay không thích, ở độ tuổi nào, hoạt động cụ thể, và cảm xúc kèm lý do.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often rode my little bicycle around the playground with neighbors when I was seven. We played games, fed the ducks, and had picnics on weekends. Those outings made me feel happy and free because I could play outside with friends.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) và cho lý do rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như “I do not really going” — phải là “I don't really go”. Nêu tần suất nếu có và dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do. Cố gắng cung cấp 2-3 câu ngắn, cụ thể về lý do và cảm xúc.

例: Not really. I don't often go to parks nowadays because I am busy studying English and preparing for exams on most weekends. Occasionally I visit a park to relax, but usually I prefer to spend time on language practice.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi về việc có muốn nhiều công viên hơn không. Tránh câu lặp và từ không rõ nghĩa. Nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao cần thêm công viên (ví dụ: không gian xanh, sức khỏe, chỗ cho trẻ em). Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để liên kết ý, và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “green spaces”, “fresh air”, “recreation”.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces and fresh air for residents. More parks would give people places to exercise, relax, and take photos of nature. They would also improve the overall quality of life in crowded neighborhoods.

提案: Trả lời rõ ràng là có hay không, và nói tên công viên cụ thể hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn đến (ví dụ: công viên lớn có hồ, công viên rừng). Giải thích vì sao (ví dụ: hoạt động, cảnh quan, tiện ích). Tránh cấu trúc lặp và dùng tính từ một cách chính xác (ví dụ: “fun”, “exciting”, “interesting”).

例: Yes, I would like to visit a large botanical garden or a lakeside park in the future. I am interested in places with beautiful flowers, walking paths, and opportunities for photography. Such parks seem relaxing and exciting because there are many activities and good scenery.

× There's pickled egg like a piccolo inner which two neighborhood and a ivory bicycle when I was 7 year old.

✓ When I was seven years old, there was a small park in my neighborhood and I had an ivory-colored bicycle.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect use of 'There's' for past context, wrong word choices (pickled egg, piccolo inner) and missing articles and verb agreement. Rephrase as a clear past-tense sentence, include the correct article 'a' before 'small park', use 'was' for existence in the past, and use 'had' to indicate possession of the bicycle. Also write numbers in words for small numbers in formal sentences.

× Today I bicycle with my friend every day.

✓ Today I ride my bicycle with my friend every day.

The verb 'bicycle' is incorrectly used as a verb; the correct verb is 'ride' in present simple for habitual actions. Use 'ride my bicycle' and 'every day' to indicate routine. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I ride'.

× I feel it's trick like and funny.

✓ I feel it's tricky and funny.

'Trick like' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'tricky'. Use 'and' to connect adjectives. 'Feel' + 'it is' is acceptable; use the adjective form 'tricky' not 'trick'.

× I do not really going to park because I don't have much very free time and other weekend I spend time learning speaking, writing and learning very many thing English.

✓ I do not really go to the park because I do not have much free time, and on weekends I spend time learning speaking, writing, and many other things in English.

'Do not really going' is wrong: use base form after 'do not' -> 'do not go' (modal/auxiliary structure). 'Much very free time' is redundant; use 'much free time' or 'a lot of free time'. 'Other weekend' should be 'on weekends'. List items need correct ordering and count: 'many other things in English.' Use commas to separate items.

× I'm personally the park in the city is very beautiful and many thin farty and and I feel many I feel free air and taking photo many photo beautiful nature in the park.

✓ Personally, the parks in the city are very beautiful and full of things to do, and I feel the fresh air there; I like taking many photos of the beautiful nature in the park.

The original has article and number agreement errors: 'the park in the city is' may be better as 'the parks in the city are' if speaking generally. 'Many thin farty' is nonsensical; replace with 'full of things to do'. 'I feel many I feel free air' should be 'I feel the fresh air'. Use 'taking many photos' instead of 'taking photo many photo'. Maintain subject-verb agreement for plural 'parks' -> 'are'.

× Personally I very like want to park in the future because I think the park in the future it funny, exciting and many many thing are interesting.

✓ Personally, I really want to go to parks in the future because I think future parks will be fun, exciting, and full of many interesting things.

Use 'really want' instead of 'very like want'. 'Want to go to parks' is the correct verb phrase. For future prediction, use 'will be' rather than 'it'. 'Many many thing are interesting' should be 'full of many interesting things' with correct pluralization and adjective placement. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper word order.