Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (chia động từ, cấu trúc “used to” và dạng động từ), giảm tiếng “uh/umm” để mạch lạc hơn, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động nào, cảm xúc). Hạn chế dài quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ đơn (e.g., and, so, because).

例: Yes. When I was a child, my mother used to take me to the park to relax and play games. We often played badminton and took short walks together, so I felt happy and refreshed.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề, tránh từ lặp và tiếng ngắt quãng. Nên nêu lý do rõ ràng và thêm một liên kết (e.g., so, therefore) cùng với một chi tiết cụ thể về lịch trình để thuyết phục hơn.

例: Not really. These days I am very busy with assignments and exams, so I usually spend my free time studying instead of going to the park. However, I try to visit on weekends when I have no deadlines.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chuẩn và từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., "I would like" / "more parks would give people more space"). Tránh phát âm lúng túng và sử dụng liên từ để tổ chức ý (because, so). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích (chạy bộ, chơi thể thao, không gian cho trẻ em).

例: Yes, I would. More parks would give people extra space to relax and exercise, which would improve public health. For example, new parks could provide jogging paths and playgrounds for families.

提案: Trả lời rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết cụ thể về một hoặc hai công viên bạn muốn đến (tên/đặc điểm) và lý do. Tránh dùng cấu trúc điều kiện không cần thiết nếu bạn có thể nói về kế hoạch tương lai (will/plan). Giảm tiếng ngắt quãng và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes. I plan to visit several parks in the future, especially larger city parks with lakes where I can relax and play sports with friends. For instance, I would like to try the new riverside park because it has cycling paths and picnic areas.

× Well, uh, when I were younger, my mother used to, uh, pick me up to there, uh, to relax and playing sport with me.

✓ Well, uh, when I was younger, my mother used to take me there to relax and play sports with me.

'Were' is incorrect for first singular; use 'was' for past tense of be. 'Pick me up to there' is ungrammatical; use 'take me there'. After 'used to' use base verb forms: 'relax and play sports'. Use plural 'sports' for activities. Suggestions: use 'when I was younger' for past reference, 'take me there' for correct verb and preposition, and 'play sports' (base form) after 'used to'.

× And sometimes we also talk, uh, together, uh, about the daily routine.

✓ And sometimes we also talked together about our daily routine.

The context is past habitual (when I was younger), so present tense 'talk' is inconsistent; use past 'talked'. Also add 'our' to specify whose routine. Suggestion: maintain past tense for actions that happened regularly in the past: 'we also talked about our daily routine'.

× Well, probably not all because uh, this day I'm quite busy with assignments and uh, umm, exams, so I usually umm, invest my time to umm, complete my homework rather than umm, going to the park.

✓ Well, not really, because these days I'm quite busy with assignments and exams, so I usually invest my time in completing my homework rather than going to the park.

'Probably not all' is unclear; 'not really' fits better. 'This day' should be 'these days' for a general current situation. Use 'invest my time in' + gerund: 'completing my homework'. After 'rather than' use verb base or gerund consistently: 'rather than going to the park' is correct. Suggestions: use 'these days' for ongoing situations, 'invest time in' with gerund, and keep parallel forms after 'rather than'.

× Well, uh, I'm really wanna MMM because uh, many's park will makes them umm, people have more uh, spacious to umm, relax and uh, uh, playing sport to improve fitness and uh, limit the time uh, limit.

✓ Well, I really want more parks because many parks will give people more space to relax and play sports to improve fitness and reduce time spent indoors.

'I'm really wanna' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I really want'. 'Many's park' is incorrect; use 'many parks'. 'Will makes' is subject-verb disagreement; should be 'will give' or 'will make' with correct subject. 'them people have more spacious' is wrong word order; use 'give people more space'. 'playing sport' should be 'play sports' (base form after 'to' or gerund depending). 'limit the time limit' is unclear; likely 'reduce time spent indoors' or 'limit sedentary time'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms, subject-verb agreement, proper noun phrases ('many parks'), and concise phrasing like 'give people more space to relax and play sports'.

× There are, if I had a chance, I always wonder, explore many parks that are where I can go there to do many things like uh, relax or umm, uh, playing sports with my friends or with my family there.

✓ Yes. If I had the chance, I would like to visit many parks where I can relax or play sports with my friends or family.

Sentence is run-on and mixes tenses. Start with a clear response 'Yes.' Use conditional correctly: 'If I had the chance, I would like to' or 'I would visit'. 'Parks that are where I can go there' is redundant; use 'parks where I can'. 'Playing sports' should be 'play sports' to match 'can'. Suggestions: use conditional structure 'If I had the chance, I would...', remove redundant words ('there', 'that are'), and keep verbs consistent with modal/can: 'where I can relax or play sports'.