Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and add one or two specific details. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add a linking phrase to enrich the reply.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often spent afternoons there with my friends, playing on the swings and climbing trees, which gave me many happy memories.

提案: Give a clear direct answer using present tense, remove hesitations and repetitions, and provide a concise reason with a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct basic grammar.

例: Not really. Nowadays I rarely visit parks because after work I feel exhausted and prefer to rest at home.

提案: Start with a direct sentence, use correct prepositions and plural forms, and add a specific reason or example. Use a linking word (e.g., because or so) and avoid vague phrases like "whatever they want."

例: Absolutely. I would like more parks in my city because many children need safe play areas, and new parks would help them make lasting childhood memories.

提案: Respond with a clear conditional or future sentence, fix grammar (articles, prepositions, country name), and give one specific example of a park or country with reasons. Keep it concise and coherent using a linking word.

例: If I have the chance, I would like to visit parks in Australia, for example national parks where I can see native animals and large areas of trees and lush greenery.

× Yes, I like going to park when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use simple past 'liked'. Also 'going to park' is missing article or plural; use 'parks' for general meaning. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past habits: 'I liked going to parks when I was a kid.'

× I like hanging out, hanging out with my child friends and play with them.

✓ I liked hanging out with my childhood friends and playing with them.

Because the context is past, verbs should be in past form: 'liked'. Parallel structure requires gerunds for coordinated verbs: 'hanging out... and playing'. 'Child friends' is incorrect collocation; use 'childhood friends'. Maintain consistent verb forms.

× Yeah, at my age now, it's I don't like it anymore.

✓ No, at my age now, I don't like it anymore.

The original mixes filler and contradicting tenses. Use present simple 'I don't like it anymore' to describe current preference. 'Yeah' followed by 'I don't' is awkward; replace with 'No' or remove 'Yeah' to match negative meaning.

× I just when, when when I get home after the work, I feel like I just need to rest, sleep because it I'm tired.

✓ When I get home after work, I feel like I need to rest and sleep because I'm tired.

Remove disfluent repetitions and unnecessary articles: 'after the work' should be 'after work'. Use parallel verbs 'rest and sleep' and correct contraction 'I'm tired'. Eliminate redundant 'just' and fix word order for clarity.

× Absolutely yes, because there's a lot of children on my city so they can play whatever they want and they experience the best childhood memories.

✓ Absolutely yes, because there are a lot of children in my city so they can play however they want and experience the best childhood memories.

Use 'there are' for plural existence. Preposition is 'in my city' not 'on my city'. 'A lot of' with countables requires plural noun: 'children' is fine but pair with 'there are'. 'Whatever they want' is conversational; 'however they want' is more idiomatic. Remove redundant 'they' before 'experience' to keep sentence natural.

× If I have a chance to go a park in the future, I would go to the park and the other counter, for example in the Australia, so I can see like animals, a lot of trees, a lot of green colors and.

✓ If I have a chance to go to a park in the future, I would go to parks in other countries, for example Australia, so I can see animals, many trees and lots of greenery.

Use 'go to a park' with correct preposition 'to'. Conditional 'If I have a chance... I would' is acceptable but consider 'If I had a chance... I would' for hypothetical situations; here 'have' is fine for real possibility. 'the other counter' is incorrect; likely meant 'other countries'. Remove unnecessary article before 'Australia'. Use 'animals' without 'like'. Replace 'a lot of green colors' with 'lots of greenery' or 'many green trees'. Ensure sentence is complete and natural.