Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意基本語法與句型完整性，使用主謂一致與正確時態；回答要更自然、連貫，不要用太多短句片段。可先用一個主題句回答，再用1–2句具體細節支持，用連接詞串連。比如把“used to sit under the tree and feel the wind”合併為完整句並補充具體回憶或原因。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to sit under a big oak tree and watch squirrels playing while feeling the cool breeze, which made me feel peaceful and happy.

提案: 保持語意清晰並改進語法與連貫性，合併句子避免冗長或片段；使用連接詞（however, although, so）來表達對比，並給出具體例子（例如週末或每天的某個時間）。注意時態和慣用語（'I try to'而不是'I still will'）。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I’m busier as a university student. When I have free time, for example on weekends, I try to visit a nearby park to relax and feel the cool breeze on my face.

提案: 避免語法錯誤和不自然的表達，使用正確的片語（例如 'rather go to the park than sit at the computer all day'）。把理由具體化，說明公園帶來的好處（運動、社交、放鬆），並使用連接詞使句子流暢。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I would rather go to the park than sit at the computer all day. Parks offer a refreshing place to walk, exercise and meet friends.

提案: 改進句子結構與詞形（如 'I would like to go to' 而不是 'I like to going to'），並具體說明想去的公園或動物園名稱和原因（例如特殊動物、文化體驗或景觀）。使用連接詞展開理由。

例: Yes, I would like to visit famous zoo parks in Tokyo, Malaysia and Thailand because they have diverse wildlife and beautiful natural settings that would let me experience different species and local environments.

× Yes, the park is the one of my most important part of my life.

✓ Yes, the park is one of the most important parts of my life.

原句中有冠词和名词数的问题。“the one of my most important part”不符合英文习惯。应去掉“the”，用“one of the”结构并使名词复数："one of the most important parts"。建议记住“one of the + 复数名词”的固定用法。

× I used to sitting under the tree.

✓ I used to sit under the tree.

“used to”后面要接动词原形，不能接动名词-ing形式。正确为“I used to sit...”。建议记住“used to + 动词原形”表示过去常做的事。

× And feels the wind.

✓ And feel the wind.

该句缺少主语，人称和动词形式不匹配。上下文主语是“I”，在并列短句中应省略重复主语但动词要用原形或与主语一致："(I) feel the wind"或更自然地合并为"I used to sit under the tree and feel the wind." 建议将句子合并或补全主语，使主谓一致。

× And I also like the wild animals.

✓ And I also liked wild animals.

原句时态不一致。因为前面在说童年经历用过去时，故此处也应使用过去时“liked”。另外“the wild animals”在此处可省略定冠词直接说“wild animals”。建议保持时态一致：描述过去时用过去式。

× Of course yes, sadly I'm a university student.

✓ Of course — sadly, I'm a university student now.

原句需要加上时间词“now”更清楚地表示现在情况，并在语流上加逗号或破折号以提高可读性。此处并非严格语法错误，但建议在现在时描述当前身份时加上“now”。（SIMPLIFIED CHINESE: 建议在描述现在的状态时加上时间副词如“now”来明确时态。）

× I put more efforts on my studies so I don't have so much time like before.

✓ I put more effort into my studies, so I don't have as much time as before.

“put more efforts on”是错误搭配。正确说法是“put more effort into”或“make more effort on/with”。另外比较结构应为“as much ... as before”，不能用“so much time like before”。建议记住固定搭配："put effort into"和比较结构"as ... as"。

× In my free time I still will go to parks and feel the cool wind on my face.

✓ In my free time I still go to parks and feel the cool wind on my face.

在表达习惯性或现在的常态时不应使用“will”。“will”表示将来或意愿，此处更自然用一般现在时“I still go”。建议用一般现在时描述经常做的事情。

× Yes, instead of sitting on the PC whole day I would rather going to park.

✓ Yes, instead of sitting at the PC the whole day, I would rather go to the park.

“instead of”后面应接动名词（sitting）是正确，但“would rather”之后要接动词原形“go”，不能用“going”。另外常用介词搭配为“sit at the PC”或“on the PC”不太自然，通常说“at the PC”；并且“the whole day”需要定冠词，表示整天。最后“park”前需加定冠词“the”或复数形式视情。建议记住“would rather + 动词原形”的结构。

× Sitting there and it makes me feel refreshing.

✓ Sitting there makes me feel refreshed.

原句中存在结构混乱并且使用错误的形容词/分词。应把句子合并为“Sitting there makes me feel refreshed.” 用“refreshed”（形容感受）而非“refreshing”（表示使人提神的东西）。此外不需要多余的“and it”。建议注意主句结构和形容词/分词的选择。

× Yes, they are actually.

✓ Yes, there are, actually.

原句“they are actually”缺乏明确指代且语序不自然。回答“Are there any parks...?”时正确的肯定回答应使用“There are”结构来表示存在："Yes, there are, actually." 建议在回答存在类问题时使用“There is/There are”。

× I like to going to the zoo parks like in Tokyo, Malaysia, Thailand.

✓ I would like to go to zoos in places like Tokyo, Malaysia, and Thailand.

“like to going”是不正确搭配。应使用“like to do”或“like doing”，但此处表示愿望用“would like to go”更合适。并且“zoo parks”不常用，改为“zoos”更自然，列举地点时在每项之间用逗号并前置“in”。建议使用“would like to + 动词原形”或“like to + 动词原形/doing”。

× It is important to me to be close to the nature.

✓ It is important to me to be close to nature.

“the nature”在英文中通常不加定冠词，除非特指某种“the nature of...”或“the natural world”时使用。正确说法是“close to nature”。建议记住“nature”在表示大自然时通常不加冠词。