Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và thiếu thông tin hỗ trợ. Hãy mở rộng bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi rồi thêm 1-2 câu giải thích cụ thể (ví dụ: lý do không thích, hoạt động lúc đó). Dùng từ nối đơn giản nếu cần.

例: No, I didn't. When I was a child I preferred staying at home because my neighborhood had few safe play areas. For example, there were no swings or playgrounds, so I usually played with toys inside.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc. Nên trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề đúng ngữ pháp, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một chi tiết hỗ trợ. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so).

例: Not really. I don't enjoy going to parks very much because they are often crowded and noisy. For example, when I visit a nearby park there are usually many people and loud activities, so I find it hard to relax.

提案: Ý chính rõ hơn nhưng có lỗi diễn đạt và lặp từ. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do với từ nối (because, therefore) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về tình trạng đông đúc hoặc tiếng ồn.

例: No, I wouldn't. I wouldn't want more parks in my city because the existing ones are usually overcrowded and noisy. For instance, the main park next to my house is full of street vendors and loud music, so it's not a peaceful place to relax.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, chứa tiếng ngập ngừng và lỗi từ vựng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No/Maybe) rồi nêu tên một công viên cụ thể hoặc lý do rõ ràng, tránh tiếng ững ừ. Thêm thông tin mô tả về công viên mong muốn (vì sao muốn tới hoặc không).

例: Maybe, but I'm not sure. I wouldn't choose crowded places like the city center parks; instead I might visit a quiet nature reserve outside the city for hiking and peace.

× Now I don't like still going to park.

✓ Now I still don't like going to parks.

The student used word order incorrectly and omitted plural/article. In English, adverb 'still' should be placed before the auxiliary verb: 'still don't like'. 'Going to park' needs plural or article: use 'going to parks' to match general meaning. Suggestion: place 'still' before 'don't' and use 'going to parks' for general statements.

× No, I don't like because more park in my city is so crowded and busy and I don't like busy and noisy.

✓ No, I don't. I don't like it because the parks in my city are so crowded and noisy, and I don't like busy, noisy places.

Multiple article and plural errors: 'more park' is incorrect; use 'the parks' or 'parks' to refer to multiple parks. 'In my city is' should agree in number: plural subject 'parks' needs 'are'. Also need pronoun/object 'it' after 'I don't like'. Improve cohesion by splitting into two clauses. Suggestion: use 'the parks in my city are' and 'noisy places' for natural phrasing.

× Maybe, but I think I umm, know because I don't like PC and Northern Place.

✓ Maybe, but I think I know, because I don't like PC or Northern Place.

Awkward filler 'umm' removed; 'I think I know' is better than 'I think I umm, know'. Also use 'or' when listing alternatives (I don't like PC or Northern Place). Ensure present tense 'don't like' fits the question about future parks. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use 'or' for negative choices.

× No, I don't.

✓ No, I didn't.

In response to 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' the correct answer should use past tense 'didn't' to match the question. Student replied 'No, I don't.' which is present tense and mismatches the question. Suggestion: match tense of short answers to the question: use 'No, I didn't.'