Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng các cụm từ hợp lý (park, trees, ride a bike) và tránh lặp từ, tiếng ồn (uh). Nên cung cấp thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể có liên quan và dùng từ nối nếu cần. Ví dụ: nêu cảm xúc (enjoyed), mô tả hoạt động (riding bike with father) và tính từ miêu tả (big, shady).

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because the trees were very big and shady. I often rode a bike there with my father, which made those visits fun and memorable.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác và từ vựng phù hợp (prefer 'I still like going to parks', 'ride a bike', 'see flowers', 'take photos'). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (I'd like go → I'd like to go) và lặp từ. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, because...).

例: Yes, I still like going to parks. I often ride my bike there and enjoy seeing the trees and flowers, and I sometimes take photos of the scenery.

提案: Cần diễn đạt ý tưởng rõ: dùng câu chủ đề nêu quan điểm (Yes, I would) và giải thích bằng lý do cụ thể, tránh lặp từ và ngữ pháp bị lỗi (a many park → many parks). Sử dụng liên từ (because, so) để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích (exercise, relax, family time).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because having many parks means people can find one near their home. This would encourage outdoor exercise, family outings and a healthier community.

提案: Cần trả lời cụ thể: nêu tên hoặc loại công viên muốn đến, lý do cụ thể (peaceful, good for photos, cycling). Tránh lỗi từ vựng (scaring → scary? unclear), sửa 'ride my pipe' → 'ride my bike'. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng từ nối hợp lý.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a peaceful park with lakes and flower gardens in the future. It would be perfect for taking photos and riding my bike, and I think it would be very relaxing.

× Yes, I like going to park when I try because when I go to park I can see a tree in a uh in in park is very big and I cannot ride by with my father.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because when I went to the park I could see a very big tree and I could not ride my bike with my father.

The student mixes present and past tenses; the question asks about childhood, so past tense is required. Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. Use 'bike' instead of 'by'. Use modal 'could' for past ability. Suggestion: decide the time frame (past) and change verbs to past (like -> liked, try -> was a child/when I was young, go -> went). Use correct nouns ('park' with article or plural) and 'bike'.

× Yes or I'd like go to pub because now I always go to park or ride pipe and and I can see a tree flower and take a photo in park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because now I always go to the park to ride my bike and I can see trees and flowers and take photos in the park.

Student uses incorrect verb forms and articles and mixes 'pub' (wrong word) and 'pipe' (wrong word). Maintain present simple for current habits: 'like' -> 'still like', 'go' -> 'going', 'ride pipe' -> 'ride my bike'. Use plural for general nouns (trees, flowers) and plural 'parks' or 'the park'. Use 'take photos' for habitual action. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and correct nouns and articles.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my city because when I have a many park in my city or everyone can can go can go a park near near your near your house and they can ride by or go to park in a.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because if I had many parks in the city, everyone could go to a park near their house and they could ride bikes or go to the park.

Problems: articles and countable nouns ('more park' -> 'more parks', 'a many park' incorrect -> 'many parks' or 'a lot of parks'), incorrect tense/conditional ('when I have' -> 'if I had' or 'if there were'), pronouns ('your' -> 'their'), repeated words removed. 'Ride by' -> 'ride bikes'. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns, use conditional structure for hypothetical situations, and use appropriate possessive pronouns.

× Yes, I want to go any park in the future because when I because I can see a many many peaceful and I can all take take a photo many are scaring and I can ride my pipe.

✓ Yes, I want to visit parks in the future because I can see many peaceful places, take many photos, and ride my bike.

Errors: 'any park' awkward — use 'visit parks' or 'a park'; verb forms and articles incorrect ('a many many' -> 'many'), adjective use ('peaceful' needs noun 'places'), repetition removed, 'scaring' incorrect for 'scenic' or unnecessary. 'pipe' -> 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'visit' for future intention, use plural 'parks' for general desire, use 'many' before plural nouns, and choose correct adjectives ('peaceful places', 'scenic views').