Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they made my childhood happy. For example, I used to play on the swings and have picnics with my family every weekend, which created many joyful memories.

提案: Use correct verb forms and articles, and expand slightly with a specific reason using a linking word. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid vague words like ‘very’ without detail.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For instance, I often read a book on a bench and listen to birds, which makes me feel calm and refreshed.

提案: Give a clear statement then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Correct singular/plural and verb agreement, and combine short fragments into coherent sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide peaceful spaces for people to relax. For example, additional parks would offer places for exercise and fresh air, which would improve residents’ mental health.

提案: Avoid unclear or inappropriate answers. Provide a polite, specific description of a park you want to visit, using a reason to explain your choice. Keep to one or two sentences and be precise.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a large botanical garden in the future because I enjoy seeing diverse plants and learning about different species, and it would be a peaceful place to take photographs.

× Yes, I really like to going back as a child because childhood makes our life very happy.

✓ Yes, I really liked going back to the park as a child because childhood made my life very happy.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly. The question asks about past habit; use past tense 'liked' and 'made'. 'Like to going' is ungrammatical: use 'liked going' or 'liked to go'. 'Back' needs an object (the park) and 'our life' is vague compared to 'my life.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct verb form: 'liked going' or 'liked to go.'

× When we are child our life spend very happy.

✓ When we were children, our lives were very happy.

Multiple errors: singular/plural mismatch and verb tense. 'Child' should be plural 'children' to match 'we.' 'Life' should be plural 'lives' for 'we.' Verb 'spend' incorrect; use past tense 'were' with adjective 'happy' or 'were very happy.' Also add comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: ensure subject and noun number agree and use past tense 'were.'

× Yes, I'm still like going parks now because when I go to park I feel very joyful.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because when I go to a park I feel very joyful.

'I'm still like' is incorrect for present preference; use 'I still like.' 'Going parks' needs preposition 'to' and plural 'parks' or 'going to parks.' 'Go to park' needs an article: 'go to a park' or 'go to the park.' Suggestion: use correct present simple 'I like' for general likes and include 'to' and appropriate articles.

× Yes, I like to see more and more parks in my city because parks meets our mind.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more and more parks in my city because parks calm our minds.

Question 'Would you like' asks about desire; reply should use 'would like' or 'want.' 'Parks meets' has subject-verb agreement error: 'parks' (plural) requires 'meet' but more natural is 'calm' or 'refresh.' 'Our mind' is singular and awkward with 'parks'; use plural 'minds.' Suggestion: respond with 'I would like' and ensure verb agrees with plural subject and choose appropriate verb collocation 'calm our minds.'

× Very peaceful.

✓ They are very peaceful.

Fragment: 'Very peaceful.' lacks subject and verb. To be a complete sentence, add subject 'They' (meaning the parks) and verb 'are.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments in responses; use full sentences like 'They are very peaceful.'

× When we go to the park, we uh, feel the fresh air.

✓ When we go to the park, we feel the fresh air.

Grammar is mostly correct; remove filler 'uh,' and article 'the' before 'fresh air' is optional but acceptable. If speaking generally, better: 'we feel fresh air' or 'we enjoy the fresh air.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and choose natural collocations: 'we enjoy the fresh air.'

× Yes, I want to go naked park.

✓ Yes, I want to go to a nudist park.

'Naked park' is ungrammatical and potentially inappropriate phrasing. Use correct noun phrase 'nudist park' or 'nude beach' and include preposition 'to' and article 'a.' Suggestion: use 'go to a nudist park' or clarify intention politely: 'I would like to visit a nudist park.'