Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve samimi ama dağınık ve eksik. Türkçe olarak: Cümle yapılarınızı daha net kurun, gereksiz doldurma kelimelerinden (like, uh) kaçının ve eksik kalan bilgiyi tamamlayın. Örneğin tek bir ana cümle kurup sonra iki kısa destekleyici cümle verin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin ve en fazla 4-5 cümlede kalın.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they felt like an outdoor playground. For example, I used to play on the swings and climb the jungle gym with my friends. Also, parks were a great place to meet neighbors and make new friends.

提案: Cevap mantıklı ama ifade dağınık ve tekrarlar fazla. Türkçe olarak: Gereksiz tekrar ve dolgu seslerini (uh, I, I'm) azaltın. Net bir ana cümle ile başlayın (evet/hayır ve neden) ve ardından kısa bir açıklama verin. Yaşınızı belirtirken daha doğal bir sebep (ilgi değişimi, daha az zaman gibi) gösterin.

例: I still like parks, but I visit them less often now because my interests have changed and I have less free time. For instance, I prefer meeting friends at cafes or going to sports facilities rather than using playground equipment.

提案: Cevap açık fakat bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlatım zayıf. Türkçe olarak: 'children' gibi doğru kelime seçimlerine dikkat edin, cümleleri düzgün bağlayın (for example, however) ve sebep sonuç ilişkisini net kurun. Bir karşılaştırma veya öneri ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because public green spaces improve quality of life. For example, Konya has many small playgrounds for children, but I think there should also be parks with walking paths, benches and sports areas for teenagers and adults.

提案: Cevap samimi ama karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Türkçe olarak: Konuyu daha mantıklı sırada anlatın (yer, neden, detay), yanlış çekimleri düzeltin ve belirsiz ifadeleri netleştirin. Örneklerle detay verin ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a park in the Netherlands that I went to once; it wasn’t in Amsterdam but it had excellent facilities. For example, there was a smooth skating track and many sculptures, which made it perfect for roller skating and relaxing, so I’d love to go back.

× I liked going parks when I was a child 'cause like as a kid parks are your playground.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child because, as a kid, parks were your playground.

Incorrect or missing preposition with verb+ing and article/tense issues. The verb phrase 'going parks' needs the preposition 'to' (Grammar type 8 and 11). Also use 'because' instead of informal ' 'cause' and 'were' for past tense agreement. Suggestion: Use 'going to' with places and ensure past tense for 'be'. Use commas to improve clarity.

× Like also you can socialize by parks.

✓ Also, you can socialize in parks.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect for participating in activities at a location; use 'in' (Grammar type 11). Suggestion: Say 'socialize in parks' or 'at parks' to indicate where the activity happens.

× My favorite item was.

✓ My favorite thing was the swings.

Sentence is incomplete and unclear (Grammar type 26). 'Item' is awkward; provide the missing object. Suggestion: Complete the sentence by naming the favorite feature, e.g. 'My favorite thing was the swings.'

× To be honest, I would love to go parks, but I, I'm, uh, 16 years old, so my time passed.

✓ To be honest, I would love to go to parks, but I'm 16 years old, so my time has passed for that.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' with places (Grammar type 11 and 8). Also 'my time passed' is unnatural; use 'my time has passed for that' and contraction consistency. Suggestion: Use 'go to parks' and a clearer phrase about being too old.

× So actually I'm not, I don't even, don't even fit into swings.

✓ So actually I don't even fit on the swings anymore.

Incorrect preposition and awkward repetition. Use 'fit on the swings' rather than 'fit into swings' (Grammar type 12 and 11). 'Fit into' implies clothing; for playground equipment use 'fit on'. Suggestion: Use 'fit on the swings' and remove repeated fragments.

× For example in Konya there are so many parks for Childs to go and have fun and socialize but not for me.

✓ For example, in Konya there are so many parks for children to go and have fun and socialize, but not for me.

'Childs' is incorrect plural form; correct plural is 'children' (Grammar type 1). Also punctuation improvements. Suggestion: Use 'children' as the plural of 'child' and add commas for clarity.

× I guess I it's not my age.

✓ I guess it's not for my age.

Awkward and ungrammatical phrasing (Grammar type 26). 'I it's' is incorrect. Better: 'I guess it's not for my age' or 'I guess I'm too old for that.' Suggestion: Choose a clear structure like 'I'm too old for that.'

× Actually, this is my favorite question in this exam because there is a park in Holland.

✓ Actually, this is my favorite question in this exam because there is a park in the Netherlands.

Geographical name usage: 'Holland' is often used informally for the Netherlands; better to use 'the Netherlands' (Grammar type 5/17). Suggestion: Use correct country name 'the Netherlands' or say 'Holland' if you mean that region; include article 'the' with country name.

× I guess it's wasn't Amsterdam.

✓ I guess it wasn't in Amsterdam.

Incorrect tense and missing preposition. 'It's wasn't' is ungrammatical; use 'it wasn't' and include 'in Amsterdam' (Grammar type 5 and 11). Suggestion: Use 'I guess it wasn't in Amsterdam.'

× The roller skates, I it was perfect and I wanna go there one more time.

✓ The roller skating there was perfect, and I want to go back one more time.

Fragmented and awkward structure (Grammar type 26). 'The roller skates, I it was perfect' is ungrammatical; use 'roller skating' or 'the roller skating rink' and 'I want' instead of 'I wanna' in formal speech. Suggestion: Say 'The roller skating was perfect, and I want to go back.'