Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and relevant, but you can improve by adding one specific supporting detail and using a linking phrase to make it more complete. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks with my mom when I was a child. For example, we often spent Sunday afternoons feeding ducks and having picnics, which made those visits very memorable.

提案: Your idea is clear but the answer has hesitations, repetition and some unclear phrasing. Improve fluency by removing filler words, using one clear topic sentence, and add a brief reason with a linking word. Aim for natural wording and one or two supporting details.

例: I would like to go to parks now, but I rarely have time because of work. However, I find parks very relaxing, so whenever I get a free afternoon I try to visit one to unwind.

提案: Your response answers the question and gives reasons, but has many hesitations, grammar errors (singular/plural), and some redundancy. Improve by using cleaner sentences, correct article/plural usage, and one clear supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., because, therefore).

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because we currently have only one small park that becomes overcrowded on weekends. Therefore, adding another park would give people more space to relax and exercise.

提案: Your answer names a specific park and expresses feeling, which is good. Improve tense consistency (use present/future), reduce repetition, and combine ideas into one or two concise sentences with a brief reason or detail.

例: In the future I would like to visit Ueno Park in Tokyo again because I found its peaceful atmosphere and beautiful cherry trees very relaxing.

× Yes, when I was a child I used to go to the parks with my mom.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to go to the park with my mom.

'The parks' is plural and implies multiple parks; context refers to parks in general or a single park visited in childhood. English commonly uses 'go to the park' when speaking about visiting a park habitually. Change to singular 'the park' for natural phrasing.

× As I'm getting older, I don't have any time to go to the parks, but umm, I think that umm, I really took, I really wanted to go to the parks right now.

✓ As I'm getting older, I don't have time to go to the park, but I really want to go to the park now.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms: 'took' and 'wanted' are past forms inconsistent with 'right now.' Use present tense 'want' to match 'right now.' Also use singular 'the park' for natural expression and remove 'any' which is unnecessary.

× You know, it's really, really, you will feel relaxed.

✓ You know, it's really relaxing; you will feel relaxed.

Original mixes forms awkwardly. Use the adjective/participle 'relaxing' to describe the experience. Separately state 'you will feel relaxed' as a future result. This clarifies meaning and fixes pronoun/structure issues.

× Yes, I really love to see more parks in my city, especially that umm, as of the moment we only have one parks and it's really crowded.

✓ Yes, I would really like to see more parks in my city, especially because at the moment we only have one park and it's really crowded.

'One parks' is ungrammatical: 'one' requires a singular noun 'park.' Also improved word choice: 'would really like' is more natural than 'really love to see' for expressing preference; 'as of the moment' corrected to 'at the moment'.

× So it's not really, it's not really advisable to go there umm if it's weekends.

✓ So it's not really advisable to go there on weekends.

Use preposition 'on' with 'weekends' (plural) for habitual time expressions. Removed redundant repetition and unnecessary filler words.

× So umm, it will be better if we have another parks that.

✓ So, it would be better if we had another park.

'Another' must be followed by a singular noun ('park'). Also use conditional 'would be' and past-subjunctive 'had' to express a hypothetical preference more naturally.

× In the future, I wanted to visit again Ueno Park, it's located in UMM, Japan, Tokyo.

✓ In the future, I want to visit Ueno Park again; it's located in Tokyo, Japan.

'Wanted' is past tense but the speaker refers to a future plan — use present tense 'want' or 'would like.' Also reorder location to the natural 'Tokyo, Japan' and remove 'UMM' filler. Use 'again' after the verb for correct placement.

× It is really relaxing there. The ambience is really good. I really love to go again.

✓ It is very relaxing there. The ambience is lovely. I would really love to go again.

'Really relaxing' is acceptable but 'very relaxing' is slightly more natural. 'Ambience is really good' is informal; 'ambience is lovely' is a better adjective choice. 'I really love to go again' mixes tenses — use 'I would really love to go again' to express a future desire politely.