Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and pluralization. Avoid redundant phrases like “whole family members” and “have leisure time.”

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my family and I would visit a nearby park every weekend where I played on swings and had picnics — those trips were a highlight of my childhood.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, using correct grammar and coherent reasons. Use one topic sentence and then one clear supporting detail with linking words (e.g., because, so). Avoid unclear phrases like “my mind are just food waste problems.”

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go when I feel stressed or have a headache because walking among trees and breathing fresh air helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear, relevant reason. Avoid confusing or incorrect word choices like “more bugs” unless you mean biodiversity. Use linking words and specific benefits of parks (reduce pollution, improve air quality, provide green space).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they increase green space and help reduce pollution. For instance, more trees and plants would improve air quality and provide places for people to relax and exercise.

提案: Be precise about the parks and avoid confusing terms like “green spaces car parks.” Use present perfect or future forms correctly and mention specific features you want (e.g., botanical gardens, riverside parks). Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail with a linking word.

例: Yes, I would like to visit some of the new parks that have been built recently in my city. In particular, I want to explore the riverside park because it has extensive green lawns and walking paths where I can enjoy fresh air and exercise.