Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 중복되고 불필요한 담화표지가 많으며 문법과 발음 오류가 있습니다. 응답은 직접적인 주제문으로 시작하고, 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적 세부사항으로 확장해야 합니다. 예: ‘I lived in front of the biggest park in my city’ 같은 명확한 주제문을 사용하고, 왜 좋아했는지(놀이, 친구, 경치 등)를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(‘which is the, which is...’, ‘I it uh’)을 제거하고 문장 길이를 1–3문장으로 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because I lived right in front of the city’s largest park. I often played there with my friends and enjoyed the open space and playground equipment.

提案: 응답에 중복과 시제 혼동(과거/현재)이 있습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문으로 답하고, 연결어를 사용해 이유를 덧붙이세요. 예: ‘Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. In Seoul, the Han River parks are spacious and convenient, so I visit them often.’ 같은 구조로 시제를 일관되게 유지하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. In Seoul, the areas along the Han River are very spacious and well-maintained, so I often go there to relax and exercise.

提案: 대답은 간단하지만 이유가 모호하고 단어 선택이 부정확합니다(‘it is not expensive’는 공원에 적합하지 않은 표현). 명확한 이유(녹지 공간의 필요성, 건강 혜택, 커뮤니티 공간 등)를 제시하고 연결어로 구조를 정리하세요. 또한 문법(관사, 시제)을 교정하세요.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve people’s well-being and provide places for exercise and community activities. For example, a nearby park would make it easier for residents to spend time outdoors.

提案: 응답에 문법 오류와 어순 문제가 있습니다(‘I really want to Central Parks’, ‘I want to go to there’). 질문에 직접적으로 답한 뒤 구체적 이유를 제시하세요(어떤 활동을 하고 싶은지, 어떤 계절에 가고 싶은지 등). 문장은 1–3문장으로 간결하게 유지하고 전치사와 관사 사용을 정확히 하세요.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is vast and has beautiful scenery. I’d like to stroll around the lakes and see the trees, especially in autumn when the leaves change color.

× Yes, I did because I lived in front of the park, which is the, which is the biggest park in my city.

✓ Yes, I did because I lived in front of the park, which is the biggest park in my city.

Redundant filler phrase 'which is the' is repeated. Remove the extra repetition to make the sentence grammatical and fluent. Keep the definite article 'the' before 'biggest' because a superlative requires it.

× I it uh, I ate.

✓ I used to play there a lot.

Original lacks a clear verb phrase and is unintelligible. Provide a complete verb phrase fitting past habit 'used to' plus verb 'play' to convey meaning. Use 'there' to indicate the park.

× Yes, I usually I, I like to go going to parks because I lived I I'm living in Seoul and Seoul has a Han River, which is the biggest park.

✓ Yes, I usually like going to parks because I live in Seoul and Seoul has the Han River, which is one of the largest park areas.

Tense and form errors: use simple present 'usually like' for habitual action. Use 'going' after 'like' or 'to go' but not both; choose 'like going'. 'Lived' is incorrect for current residence; use 'live' or 'I'm living'. 'Han River' is a river, not a park, so adjust phrasing to 'the Han River' and avoid calling it 'the biggest park'—use 'one of the largest park areas' or simply 'many parks along the Han River'.

× Yes I do because I love park, because it is not expensive and I love nature.

✓ Yes, I do because I love parks; they are inexpensive and I love nature.

Use plural 'parks' or add an article 'the park'. 'It is not expensive' is unnatural for parks; use plural 'they are' referring to parks. Use semicolon or separate clauses to improve flow.

× I had a park in front of the my apartment.

✓ I had a park in front of my apartment.

The phrase 'the my apartment' incorrectly uses both definite article 'the' and possessive 'my'. Remove 'the' when using 'my'. 'Had' can be past if referring to previous residence.

× Yes, I am. I really want to Central Parks in New York because the park is really big and the nature is beautiful.

✓ Yes, I really want to go to Central Park in New York because it is very large and the scenery is beautiful.

'I am' is incomplete; remove it. Use 'want to go to' for desire to visit. 'Central Park' (singular) is correct name. Use 'it is' instead of 'the park is' and 'scenery' or 'nature' with adjective 'beautiful'.

× I want to go to there.

✓ I want to go there.

Using both 'to' and 'there' is redundant. Use 'go there' or 'go to [place]'. Remove 'to' before 'there'.