Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接並且語言更準確。避免語法錯誤與冗長的填充詞，並用一句主題句開頭，然後用1–2句具體細節支持。例如說明喜歡哪種設施、和誰一起玩或做什麼活動。注意單數/複數和介詞（paris→parks, go into→go to）。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I enjoyed playing on the swings and slides with my friends, and we often had picnics which made the visits really fun.

提案: 回答要更清晰並避免自相矛盾或多餘重複。先給出直接回答（Yes/No + 簡短原因），再用連接詞（for example, so, because）補充具體細節。避免含糊的詞如 'maybe' 過度使用，並簡潔描述頻率和活動。

例: Not really. I usually only go to parks when I visit my hometown to exercise. For example, I often take a short walk while listening to music, but I rarely stay to enjoy the scenery.

提案: 回答應先給出明確立場（Yes/No/Not sure），然後用1–2句具體原因支持。改善語法（depends on the situation; Beijing/Shanghai）並使用連接詞如 'however' 或 'for example' 使語意連貫。減少填充詞“umm”等。

例: I'm not sure; it depends on the city. For example, I would welcome more parks in large cities like Guangzhou or Shanghai because their parks are well maintained and pleasant to visit.

提案: 回答要更有組織：先說明願望，接著給出具體地點與理由，最後可簡述現實限制。注意簡潔性並用連接詞（because, so, however）。避免重複和不完整句子。

例: Yes, I would like to visit parks in England in the future because the countryside and gardens there look very beautiful. However, I can't plan the trip yet because I need to save more money.

× You can just use so many equipment and also you can just hang out with your friend.

✓ You can use so much equipment and also you can hang out with your friends.

这里出现可数名词与不可数名词及单复数使用错误。equipment 是不可数名词，应与 much 连用；friend 若指泛指在公园与朋友一起，应使用复数 friends 表示不止一个朋友或泛指朋友们。建议：学习可数/不可数名词区别，equipment、advice 等为不可数；若表示多位朋友用 friends。

× I like to go into Paris a child, Hmm.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child.

原句时态与人称表达不当。问题在于时间状语“as a child”要求过去习惯，用过去时 liked，且 'go into Paris' 是错误搭配（可能想说 'go to parks'）。建议：表达过去喜好用 liked + -ing 或 used to，例如 'I used to like going to parks.'

× Because it's very happy there.

✓ Because it was very enjoyable there.

句子中用法不当：it is happy 用法不自然，且描述过去应为过去时。应使用形容词 enjoyable 或副词结构来描述场所带来的感受。建议：用 it was enjoyable 或 I felt very happy there，注意时态一致。

× ...and also you can just hang out with your friend. So that will make you very happy, yes.

✓ ...and you could hang out with your friends, which made you very happy.

代词及指代不清：原句中时态和代词应与上下文一致。将 will 改为过去式 made 或者用 could/made 来表达过去的结果。建议注意时态一致并使用合适的关系代词 which 引出结果从句。

× No, I don't like it, no, but when I come back to my country sometimes because I just want to diet.

✓ No, I don't like it now, but when I go back to my country sometimes I want to exercise.

时态和动词搭配不当：原句混用现在时与不恰当词汇（diet 通常表示节食，有可能不符合上下文）。应使用 'go back' 表示回国，且说明去公园的原因用 want to exercise 或 go for a walk。建议：确保现在/现在习惯/将来时间表达清晰，选择合适动词。

× So I will just, uh, go to the park maybe just to take a walk, yeah and then listen to music and enjoy The Walking.

✓ So I will just go to the park to take a walk, listen to music and enjoy the walk.

短语搭配及 -ing 使用问题：enjoy 后面应接动名词 (enjoy walking 或 enjoy the walk)，而 'The Walking' 不正确且大小写错误。建议：enjoy + -ing 或名词短语（enjoy the walk / enjoy walking）。

× But I seldom just like appreciate maybe the scenery just in the.

✓ But I seldom appreciate the scenery there.

句子中多余或错误副词（just, maybe）导致表达混乱，并且句尾缺少地点名词。建议：简化句子，去掉冗余词，保持语序：副词（seldom）放在动词前。

× MMM, I'm not sure about it because now just for the park, I was not very curious about it.

✓ I'm not sure about it because I'm not very interested in parks now.

代词和时态混用问题：原句中 'I was not very curious about it' 与 'now' 时间状语冲突，应使用现在时 'I'm not very interested in parks now'。此外，'curious about it' 不如 'interested in parks' 自然。建议：注意时间副词与时态一致，选择恰当动词短语。

× But I think it's depends on different the situation, such as when I went to some big cities such as Guangzhou or being Shanghai.

✓ But I think it depends on the situation; for example, when I went to big cities such as Guangzhou or Shanghai.

句子结构混乱：'it's depends' 错误（多余 it），'depends on the situation' 更自然，'being Shanghai' 是错误形式，应为 'Shanghai'。建议：主谓搭配正确：It depends on ... 或 I think it depends on ...；列举城市时只列名称。

× Of course, I hope umm, I can have a good time in those cities park because those City Park is really beautiful.

✓ Of course, I hope I can have a good time in those city parks because those city parks are really beautiful.

冠词及名词单复数、大小写错误：'cities park' 应为 city parks（复合名词），'those City Park is' 时态与数不一致且 City Park 不应大写。应使用复数谓语 are。建议：复合名词改为 'city parks'，主谓一致（parks are）。

× Yes. In the future act, actually, I just want to go to England and I go to. I also want to go to see.

✓ Yes. In the future, I want to go to England. I also want to visit parks there.

未来时与表达混乱：'In the future act' 无意义，动词重复 'I go to' 未完成。应简洁使用 'I want to' 或 'I'd like to' 表示将来愿望，并明确目的地和动作。建议：用 I'd like to / I want to + 动词不定式，避免重复。

× Because I think the scenery there is so beautiful. So I just want to go to the parks there and to like have a walk just like, have a look.

✓ Because I think the scenery there is so beautiful, I want to go to the parks there to take a walk and have a look.

代词和句子连贯性问题：重复使用连词 'so' 导致冗余，'to like have a walk' 不自然，应为 'to take a walk' 或 'to go for a walk'。建议：使用不定式表达目的（to take a walk），避免口语填充词 like 和重复。

× But now I'm not sure about because now I didn't have enough money.

✓ But now I'm not sure because I don't have enough money.

时态不一致：句中有 'now'（现在）却用过去时 'didn't have'，应改为现在时 'don't have'。建议：表示当前状况用现在时态，注意时间副词与动词时态一致。