Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然流畅，避免过多语填词（例如“umm”“uh”），并注意时态一致（儿童时应该用过去时）。句子不宜过长，可以先给主题句，再用一两句具体细节支持。可以用连接词使表达更连贯，例如“for example”或“and”来连接活动和感受。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often jumped rope or went jogging there to get some exercise, and because of the fresh air I usually felt refreshed and relaxed after spending time outdoors.

提案: 回答应更简洁且语法准确。避免重复（例如两次提到“exam/results”），并注意固定表达（如“I love to”后接动词原形或改为“I still like going to parks”）。建议先直接回答，然后用一两句说明原因并给出频率或可能改变的情况。

例: I still like going to parks, but I don't have much time at the moment because I'm focusing on my studies and preparing for exams. Maybe after the exams I will visit parks more often.

提案: 回答需要更明确和逻辑清晰。注意单复数（a parks → parks or a park），避免含混的短语（“rivers made by people or by nature are formed by nature”）。先给直接意见，再举具体好处（如改善空气、休闲空间、健康益处）并用连接词衔接。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Parks improve air quality and provide places for exercise and relaxation, which benefits people's physical and mental health.

提案: 回答表达不清且语法错误较多（例如“go some parks”，“which is”与复数不一致）。“a sense of science and futuristic”应具体化，说明你指的是高科技设施、展览或互动装置。建议先说明想去什么类型的公园，然后解释原因并举例。

例: I would like to visit parks that have a futuristic design, such as science parks or technology-themed gardens. For example, a park with interactive exhibits and modern architecture would inspire my imagination and feel very modern.

× Yes I do, I love to umm, jumping a rope in the park or just uh, jogging, uh, to exercise umm when I going to park I feel refreshed and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I do. I love jumping rope in the park or just jogging to exercise. When I go to the park, I feel refreshed and relaxed.

句中“jumping a rope”应为“jumping rope”或“jump rope”；动名词用法正确，但原句有多余的冠词和口语填充词，另外“when I going to park”中动词应为一般现在时“go”。建议：使用动名词时省略不必要的冠词，句子之间用句号分开，并将动词变为正确时态。

× I love to, but I to be honest I don't have enough time these days because I just focus on my grades and exam the results of exam and of course I pay little attention to go to the parks.

✓ I do love going to parks, but to be honest I don't have enough time these days because I'm just focusing on my grades and exam results, and of course I pay little attention to going to the parks.

原句中时态和动名词使用不一致。“I love to”后接动词不定式不自然，应改为“love going”。表示当前持续的动作应使用现在进行时或现在完成进行时，此处用“I'm just focusing”更自然。“exam the results of exam”重复且语序错误，改为“exam results”。此外，“pay little attention to go to the parks”中动词不定式应改为动名词“going”。建议：表达正在进行的动作用现在进行时，后接介词to时动词用-ing形式。

× Of course, as we know, a parks provide some trees and rivers made by people or by nature are formed by nature. These can provide some good benefit to us.

✓ Of course, as we know, parks provide trees and rivers, some made by people and some formed by nature. These can provide many benefits to us.

原句混用单复数：“a parks”不正确，应为复数“parks”或单数“a park”。“some good benefit”搭配不当，应使用复数“many benefits”。另外句子结构混乱，需把“made by people”与“formed by nature”并列表达。建议：注意名词单复数一致并选择合适的量词和复数形式。

× I would like to go some parks which is full of a sense of science and a sense of futuristic because I think it can ex explained my envision and made me modern.

✓ I would like to visit parks that are full of a sense of science and a futuristic atmosphere, because I think they can express my vision and make me feel modern.

句子结构和从句搭配有问题。“go some parks”应为“visit parks”或“go to some parks”。关系从句“which is”与复数“parks”不一致，需用“that are”。“a sense of futuristic”搭配不自然，应改为“a futuristic atmosphere”。“ex explained my envision and made me modern”语法和词汇错误，应为“express my vision and make me feel modern”。建议：主从句保持数的一致，选择正确动词短语并使用自然搭配。