Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ нечеткий, смешаны времена и присутствуют грамматические ошибки. Надо давать ясное тематическое предложение, затем одно-два поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой. Используйте правильные времена (past для детства), избегайте повторов и заполнителей («uh», «like»). Например, скажите, когда именно вы ходили в парк, с кем и что вы там делали.

例: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. I often went there with my parents and played on the swings and climbed trees. Those visits were fun because I could run around freely and meet friends from the neighborhood.

提案: Ответ сумбурный, много повторов и неверные времена. Начните с прямого ответа (Present Simple), затем добавьте конкретную причину и частоту, используя связки (for example, because, usually). Сократите до максимум 3–4 предложений и избегайте междометий.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit a nearby park once or twice a week to relax and exercise. For example, I like jogging along the paths and reading on a bench in the shade.

提案: Ответ очень короткий и содержит грамматические ошибки (число, структура). Лучше дать развёрнутый ответ: сказать «no» или «yes» прямо, затем объяснить причину и привести пример. Используйте согласование (my city has many parks) и связки (because, so).

例: No, I don't think we need more parks in my city because there are already many good ones. For instance, there is a large central park and several small neighborhood parks that serve most residents well.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические и лексические ошибки. Следует дать прямой ответ, затем уточнить: если множество вариантов, скажите, что вы не уверены и назовите критерии, по которым выберете парк (location, facilities). Используйте связки (however, maybe, because) и правильную структуру.

例: I'm not sure — there are so many parks in my city that I haven't chosen a favorite yet. However, in the future I might visit the botanical garden because I've heard it has beautiful plants and peaceful walking paths.

× Yes, as a child I so like going to the park when I am a teenager and I still love it.

✓ Yes, as a child I really liked going to the park when I was a child, and I still love it.

The student mixes present and past incorrectly and uses awkward expression 'so like'. Use past tense 'liked' to describe childhood habits and 'was' for 'a child'. Replace 'so like' with 'really liked' for natural English. Also remove 'when I am a teenager' which contradicts 'as a child' and replace with 'when I was a child' for consistency.

× Yes, or when I want to like. Like, uh, to the park as a children, uh, when I going to the park now. I loved, I really like it.

✓ Yes, I go when I want to. I used to go to the park as a child, and now I still go. I really like it.

This utterance has fragmented and ungrammatical clauses. 'as a children' is wrong number and article; use 'as a child' or 'as children'. 'when I going' lacks auxiliary; use 'when I go' for present or 'used to' for past habits. Replace fragments with clear sentences: one for current habit, one for past habit, and a statement of preference.

× No, my city have a more park.

✓ No, my city has more parks.

Subject 'my city' is singular and requires 'has', not 'have'. 'a more park' is ungrammatical: 'more parks' (plural) or 'a bigger park' depending on meaning. Here 'more parks' fits the intended meaning.

× No, in my city I want or too many park and I don't know want I go to.

✓ No, there are already too many parks in my city, and I don't know which one I would go to.

This sentence misuses quantifiers and word order. Use 'too many parks' (plural) for excessive quantity. Also clarify with a dummy 'there are' to introduce existence. 'I don't know which one I would go to' corrects word order and choice of relative word. Use conditional 'would' or 'will' as appropriate for future intention.