Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve olumlu ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime seçimi var. "I was fascinating" yerine "I was fascinated" veya daha doğal olarak "I loved being there" denilmeli. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarlar azaltılmalı; maksimum 3-4 cümleyle bir ana fikir ve kısa destekleyici detay verin. Bağlaç kullanarak (for example, especially) nedeni daha akıcı sunabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I was especially fond of the swings because they made me feel like I was flying. For example, I used to spend hours there with my friends enjoying the fresh air.

提案: İyi fikir ve duygu aktarımı var, ancak cümle yapısı ve artikellerde eksiklikler bulunuyor ("to go parks" → "to go to parks"). Ayrıca cümleleri bağlamak için 'however' veya 'but' kullanımı yerinde ama daha düzgün bağlam gerekiyor. Cümleleri 2-3 kısa cümlede netleştirip bir sebep ekleyin.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like breathing fresh air and relaxing. However, I don’t have much free time at the moment, so I can only visit them occasionally.

提案: Cevapta fikir açık ama dilbilgisi ve akıcılık sorunları var (ör. "cause" yanlış; doğru kullanım "because"; "not a lot of parks" → "not many parks"). Tekrarlardan kaçının ve nedenleri mantıklı bağlantılarla sıralayın. Spesifik örnekler ekleyin (örneğin, oyun alanları, yeşil alanlar).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks because there aren’t many in my city. More parks would give children safe places to play and provide adults with green spaces for relaxation and cleaner air.

提案: Cevap çok kısa, belirsiz ve gündelik ifadeler ("wanna", "uh", "maybe") fazla kullanılmış. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra bir örnek veya neden verin. Resmî sınavda argo veya dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının. Hedef olarak belirttiğiniz yer hakkında spesifik bir park adı veya neden söylemek puanınızı yükseltir.

例: I would like to visit Central Park in New York in the future because it is famous for its size and beautiful landscapes. I’m keen to walk the trails and see the lakes and statues there.

× I was fascinating with the parks.

✓ I was fascinated by the parks.

'Fascinating' is an adjective describing something that causes interest; 'fascinated' describes a person who feels interest. Use 'fascinated by' to show the parks caused the feeling. Also use 'by' not 'with' for this passive feeling construction. Suggestion: use 'fascinated by' when a person is affected by something.

× I actually love swinging.

✓ I actually loved swinging.

The examiner asked about childhood ('Did you like going to parks as a child?'), so the student should keep past tense to match the time frame. Change present 'love' to past 'loved' to be consistent. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference in the question.

× Yeah, I still like it, breathing fresh air into my lungs.

✓ Yeah, I still like it; I enjoy breathing fresh air into my lungs.

The original is a comma splice and the participial phrase is awkward. Use a main verb 'enjoy' to link the actions clearly. Keep present tense 'still like' and 'enjoy' because the question asks about now. Suggestion: combine clauses with appropriate verbs or punctuation.

× But I don't have enough time to go parks right now.

✓ But I don't have enough time to go to parks right now.

Use the preposition 'to' with the verb 'go' when indicating movement toward a place. Also 'go to parks' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'go' when specifying destinations.

× Yes I would love to cause in my city there is not a lot of parks so it will be better for children and also adults for clean air and relaxing.

✓ Yes, I would love to, because in my city there are not a lot of parks, so it would be better for children and adults for clean air and relaxation.

Multiple issues: 'cause' is wrong; use 'because' to introduce a reason. Use 'there are' (plural) for 'parks' and 'would' for the hypothetical preference. 'Relaxing' as a noun should be 'relaxation.' Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons, match subject-verb number, and use 'would' for hypothetical outcomes.

× Also children to play.

✓ Also children would have places to play.

Fragment lacking verb and proper structure. Add 'would have places to play' to complete the sentence and show the intended meaning. Suggestion: avoid fragments by ensuring each sentence has a subject and verb.

× We need more parks.

✓ We need more parks.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It matches the context and requires no change. Suggestion: none.

× I wanna go to New York, so maybe, uh, park at New York maybe.

✓ I want to go to New York, maybe to visit some parks there.

Use the more appropriate 'want to' in formal speech instead of 'wanna.' The original is repetitive and ungrammatical ('park at New York'). Use 'visit some parks there' to express the idea clearly. Suggestion: avoid slang in formal tests and express intentions clearly.