Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be consistent with tenses, make the response more concise and natural, and add one specific detail to enrich your answer. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played hide-and-seek with my friends there, which created many happy memories because we spent whole afternoons exploring the trees and ponds.

提案: Fix minor grammar (plural forms and articles), combine short sentences for fluency, and add a precise example or a reason to support your preference.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They are great places to relax, so I often walk or jog there and sometimes meet friends to chat; I especially like visiting in spring when the flowers and trees are in bloom.

提案: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence, use linking words for contrast, and break long sentences to improve clarity. Provide one specific reason or example to justify your opinion.

例: To be honest, I don't think we need more parks in my city. Although parks are important, the city should prioritise building more schools and improving public transport because many neighbourhoods currently lack easy access to education and reliable buses.

提案: Be specific and accurate (use correct names and tenses), avoid filler words, and give a concise reason why you want to visit. Use one or two clear sentences with a linking word if needed.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit a famous theme park in England—Disneyland Paris is well known from films and TV. I want to go because the rides and shows look magical and it seems like a fun place to relax and enjoy with friends.

× Yes, I really like going to parks when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past (I liked going to parks).

× I often go there to play hide and seek with my friends and it makes a lot of memories for me.

✓ I often went there to play hide-and-seek with my friends and it created a lot of memories for me.

This sentence describes past habitual actions but uses present tense verbs 'go' and 'makes'. Use past tense 'went' and 'created' to be consistent. Also use hyphens in 'hide-and-seek' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past experiences.

× Yes, I still like going to park now.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park now.

The noun 'park' here needs the definite article 'the' when referring to parks in general activities or a specific park context. Use 'the park' or plural 'parks'. Suggestion: use 'the park' for a specific local park or 'parks' for general preference.

× Sometimes I meet my friend to chat and I really love seeing the flowers and trees, especially in spring.

✓ Sometimes I meet my friends to chat and I really love seeing the flowers and trees, especially in spring.

If the speaker means more than one friend in general, use plural 'friends'. Using singular 'my friend' is grammatical but may change meaning. The likely intended habitual action uses plural. Suggestion: choose singular or plural to match intended meaning.

× To be honest, I think my city has enough parks for residents to relax and play and instead of them building more parks in my city, they should focus on building more schools and public transport.

✓ To be honest, I think my city has enough parks for residents to relax and play, and instead of building more parks, the city should focus on building more schools and improving public transport.

The original sentence has awkward structure and unclear subject for 'them building'. Use a clearer conjunction and noun phrase: 'instead of building more parks, the city should...'. Also 'public transport' improvement is better expressed as 'improving public transport'. Suggestion: make the subject explicit and simplify the clause.

× A famous park in the world is Disney in England.

✓ A famous park in the world is Disneyland in England.

The name 'Disney' is incomplete; the correct park name is 'Disneyland'. Also 'a famous park in the world' is odd but acceptable; using the proper proper noun fixes the error. Suggestion: use correct proper names and articles as needed.

× Uh, I just seen it in the movies and TV.

✓ Uh, I just saw it in movies and on TV.

The verb 'seen' is a past participle that requires an auxiliary (have/has) for present perfect; for simple past use 'saw'. Also 'in the movies and TV' should be 'in movies and on TV'. Suggestion: use 'saw' for simple past or 'have seen' for present perfect and prepositions 'in movies' and 'on TV'.