Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and linking words to make your answer natural and coherent.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played football and tag with my friends there, and it was a welcome break from homework because it made me feel happier and more energetic.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb patterns and articles, and give a specific reason. Link ideas with a short phrase to sound natural.

例: Absolutely. I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, sitting under a tree and listening to birds makes me feel calm and recharged.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Give a specific benefit and a brief reason using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I would. More parks would provide cleaner air and pleasant spaces for exercise. As a result, people could take short breaks during the day to reduce stress and stay healthier.

提案: Give a fuller, clearer answer. If you don't have a specific park in mind, say so and then add a brief reason or a possible plan to show development and fluency.

例: Not really — I don't have a particular park in mind at the moment. However, I would like to visit any large botanical garden in the future to see different plant species and take photographs.

× When I was a kid I really fond of going to a park because I love to play with my friends, so up to my school work and we really enjoy and it lifts my spirit.

✓ When I was a kid I was really fond of going to parks because I loved to play with my friends; it helped me forget my school work and lifted my spirits.

Multiple errors: missing verb 'was' after 'really' (Sentence structure / verb use), singular/plural inconsistency ('a park' vs 'parks') and tense inconsistency (mixing present 'love' with past 'When I was a kid'). Also awkward phrase 'so up to my school work' is incorrect; replace with 'it helped me forget my school work'. 'We really enjoy' should be past 'we really enjoyed' but here consolidated to 'it helped me... and lifted my spirits' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure past tense consistently for childhood descriptions, include required copula verbs, use plural when speaking generally about parks, and simplify clauses for clarity.

× Absolutely yes I am keen to going in parks nowadays because it helps me to refresh my mind from the hectic routine of my day as parks provide me green tree which helps me to give a peaceful.

✓ Absolutely. Yes, I am keen on going to parks nowadays because they help me refresh my mind from the hectic routine of my day, as parks provide green trees that give me a sense of peace.

Errors: incorrect preposition and verb pattern 'keen to going' should be 'keen on going' (preposition with -ing). 'Going in parks' should be 'going to parks'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it helps' should be 'they help' to match plural 'parks'. 'Provide me green tree' needs plural and article: 'provide green trees' or 'provide me with green trees'. 'Helps me to give a peaceful' is ungrammatical; change to 'give me a sense of peace'. Suggestion: use correct collocations (keen on), match subjects and verbs in number, and use natural noun phrases.

× Undoubtedly, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. The greenish, the lush greenery and the fresh air from the trees helps the people of the area that refresh their mind from their work.

✓ Undoubtedly, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. The lush greenery and the fresh air from the trees help the people in the area refresh their minds from their work.

Errors: redundancy 'The greenish, the lush greenery' — 'greenish' is incorrect; use 'lush greenery'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the fresh air ... helps the people' should be 'help the people' because the compound subject ('lush greenery and fresh air') is plural. 'People of the area that refresh their mind' is awkward and has wrong relative clause; use 'people in the area refresh their minds'. Also pluralize 'mind' to 'minds'. Suggestion: remove redundant adjectives, ensure subject-verb agreement for compound subjects, and use correct relative clause structure.

× No, not really. I did not.

✓ No, not really. I don't have any particular park I want to go to in the future.

Error: 'I did not' is unclear and mismatched tense for a future-looking question; it also lacks object and is an incomplete response (sentence structure error). For a question about the future, use present simple or future modal: 'I don't' or 'I don't have any particular park I want to go to.' Suggestion: give a complete sentence that matches the question's timeframe and provides a clear negation.