Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., 'go to the park', 'with my family or friends', 'for picnics'). Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences to sound natural.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often went with my family and friends for picnics, and we played games or fed the ducks, which was always fun.

提案: Use present-tense consistently and give one specific reason with a linking phrase. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like 'now and forever'. Keep it to two sentences: one topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they make me feel relaxed, especially in spring when the trees are in bloom. Also, I like walking there to clear my mind after a busy day.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear, specific reason. Use correct nouns and phrases (e.g., 'more parks in my city', 'a good place for exercise', 'jogging'). Use a linking word like 'because' and avoid hesitations. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for people to exercise and relax. For instance, more parks would encourage jogging and outdoor classes, which would improve public health.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park or location, then add a specific purpose with a linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Use correct verbs (e.g., 'I haven't been there', 'go jogging', 'try some exercises'). Keep it to two sentences.

例: Yes, there is a park in the center of my district that I want to visit. I haven't been there yet, but I plan to go jogging and try the outdoor exercise equipment because it looks convenient and well-maintained.

× Yeah, I have been to go to the park in my container when I was young and I usually went to there with my family or my friend for fun for picnic sometime. I.

✓ Yeah, I used to go to the park in my neighborhood when I was young, and I usually went there with my family or my friends for picnics sometimes.

The sentence contains incorrect verb construction and several other issues. 'Have been to go to' is incorrect; use 'used to go' to describe a past habitual action (Grammar Problem Type 8 and also 5). 'In my container' is likely a wrong word choice; 'neighborhood' or 'area' fits context (word choice not in the list but corrected for clarity). 'Went to there' is incorrect word order; use 'went there' (preposition placement). 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match 'usually' and general habit (singular/plural issue). 'For picnic sometime' should be 'for picnics sometimes'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for repeated past actions, place adverbs and prepositions correctly, and make nouns agree in number.

× Yes, I really like to go to the park because it made me feel relaxed and feel peaceful in the spring. I really like to park now and forever.

✓ Yes, I really like to go to the park because it makes me feel relaxed and peaceful in the spring. I really like visiting parks now and in the future.

The sentence mixes present habitual action ('I really like') with a past tense verb 'made'; use present tense 'makes' to match. (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Feel peaceful' can be streamlined to 'feel peaceful'. 'I really like to park' is incorrect; use 'visiting parks' or 'going to parks'. 'Now and forever' is unnatural for future reference; use 'now and in the future'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for present habits and choose appropriate gerund or infinitive forms.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my country because is it a good way to make people, uh, who like exercise, having the park for jogging. Sometimes I, we, I want to tie jockey.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my country because it is a good way to give people who like to exercise places for jogging. Sometimes I want to try jogging.

'More park' should be plural 'more parks' (Grammar Problem Type 1). The clause 'because is it a good way' has incorrect word order and missing subject; correct to 'because it is a good way'. 'Having the park for jogging' is awkward; rephrase to 'places for jogging'. 'Sometimes I, we, I want to tie jockey' appears to attempt 'try jogging' — 'tie jockey' is incorrect word choice; corrected to 'try jogging'. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement, include proper subject-verb order, and use correct verbs for intended activities.

× Yes, I have one park in the central of my district. I haven't been to go to there, but I want to try to go for jogging or for tying something of exercise.

✓ Yes, there is one park in the center of my district. I haven't been there, but I want to try going jogging or doing some exercises there.

Use of location needs 'there is' to state existence (Grammar Problem Type 3). 'In the central of my district' is incorrect preposition and article use; 'in the center of my district' is correct (preposition/article issues combined). 'I haven't been to go to there' is incorrect verb sequence; use 'I haven't been there' (Grammar Problem Type 8/26). 'Try to go for jogging or for tying something of exercise' is ungrammatical and uses wrong verbs; use 'try going jogging' or 'do some exercises'. Suggestion: use 'there is' to introduce existence, avoid redundant verb phrases like 'been to go to', and use correct verbs for exercise activities.