Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly answers the question, but it repeats similar ideas and contains a minor tense mix (use past tense consistently). To improve, state a clear topic sentence in past tense, add one specific detail about what you did there, and avoid repeating phrases. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My grandpa used to take me there every evening, and we would feed the ducks and play on the swings, which I enjoyed most.

提案: The response answers the question and includes reasons, but it is slightly repetitive and could be more concise. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, using linking words (however/although), and giving one specific example of when you go with cousins. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I don't often go to parks now because I have a heavy study schedule. However, when my cousins visit I usually make time for a short trip to the park, for example last month we spent an hour playing football together.

提案: Good clear opinion and reason, but phrasing is informal and slightly vague. To improve, use more precise vocabulary (playgrounds, green spaces) and provide a specific suggestion for improvements. Use a linking word to connect your reason and suggestion.

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because current green spaces are few and rather plain. For example, adding well-equipped playgrounds and walking paths would make them more attractive for families and children.

提案: The answer is honest but repetitive and lacks supporting detail. To improve, give a concise topic sentence and then briefly explain why with a specific reason or one example of your preference for staying home. Avoid repeating 'really' and similar phrases.

例: Not particularly — I prefer staying at home because I find it more comfortable and productive. For instance, I enjoy studying and reading at home, so I rarely plan outdoor activities like visiting parks.

× I really enjoy going to parks.

✓ I really enjoyed going to parks.

The question asks about childhood preference (past), so the verb should be in the past tense to match the time frame. Use 'enjoyed' to indicate a past habit or feeling. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time expression 'as a child'.

× When I was a child my grandpa would usually bring me there every evening.

✓ When I was a child, my grandpa usually brought me there every evening.

Using 'would' is acceptable for repeated past actions but more natural here is the simple past 'brought' for clarity. Add a comma after the introductory clause for correct punctuation. Suggestion: use simple past for habitual past actions when context is clear.

× I don't really like going to parks nowadays because I have so much work to do at home.

✓ I don't really like going to parks nowadays because I have so much work to do at home.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence correctly uses present tense to describe current preference. Included here only to show it's correct and consistent with the tense; no change required.

× I have to study a lot and I don't have time to go to parks.

✓ I have to study a lot and I don't have time to go to the park.

When referring to parks in general as a place one would attend in that situation, use the singular with the definite article 'the park' or plural 'parks' with a quantifier. 'Go to parks' sounds unnatural in this personal context. Suggestion: use 'go to the park' to refer to visiting a park from home.

× But when my cousins come, I do usually go to the parks.

✓ But when my cousins come, I usually go to the park.

Same article issue: 'the park' is natural when speaking about going together to a park; 'the parks' is incorrect without specifying which. Also reorder 'do usually' to 'usually' for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: put adverb before the main verb and use 'the park'.

× I have to skip my studying time to go to the park with them.

✓ I have to skip my study time to go to the park with them.

'Studying time' is not idiomatic; use 'study time' or 'study hours'. The present tense 'have to' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'study time' for clarity.

× Sure I would love to see more parks in my city because a lot of children love going to parks, but there's not too much to go and it's pretty boring and plain.

✓ Sure, I would love to see more parks in my city because many children love going to parks, but there is not much to do and the parks are pretty boring and plain.

Multiple issues: add comma after interjection, use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before plural noun for more formal style, 'there's not too much to go' is incorrect — use 'there is not much to do'. Also specify 'the parks' when describing them as boring. Suggestion: correct collocations ('much to do') and article use ('the parks').

× Maybe they should add like places to play for children and it will be very nice.

✓ Maybe they should add places for children to play, and that would be very nice.

Avoid filler 'like' and restructure infinitive phrase: 'places for children to play' is more natural. Use 'that would be' to express a hypothetical result. Suggestion: remove filler words and use clear noun+infinitive structure.

× No, not really.

✓ No, not really.

This short answer is grammatically correct and matches the question; no change needed.

× I don't really have a feeling of going to any parks in the future because I love staying home.

✓ I don't really plan to go to any parks in the future because I love staying at home.

'Have a feeling of going' is awkward; use 'plan to go' or 'intend to go' for future intentions. Also use 'staying at home' (include preposition 'at'). Suggestion: choose clearer verb for intention and include 'at' with 'home'.

× I don't really like going outside at all so staying home is my only choice and I love it.

✓ I don't really like going outside at all, so staying at home is my only choice and I love it.

Add comma before conjunction 'so' to separate clauses. Use 'staying at home' with preposition 'at'. The tenses and meaning are otherwise fine. Suggestion: include comma and 'at' for idiomatic expression.