Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve düzgün cümle yapısıyla verilmelidir. Şu anki cevapta zaman uyumsuzlukları, dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Öneri: Geçmişten bahsederken doğru zaman kullanın (past tense), açık bir konu cümlesi kurun ve gerekirse bir kısa detay ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because) kullanarak mantıksal bağlantı oluşturun. Maksimum 3–4 kısa cümleyle sınırlayın.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and I could play with my friends. For example, we often spent afternoons on the swings and played hide-and-seek. Those visits were one of my favorite childhood activities.

提案: Cevap karışık ve tekrarlı; düşünce açık ifade edilmemiş. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun (ör. No, I don't go to parks much anymore), ardından sebebi net ve spesifik verin. Gereksiz konuşma dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının. Bağlaçlarla (because, so) mantığı destekleyin ve bir örnek verin.

例: No, I don't visit parks much nowadays because I prefer meeting friends at cafés where we can talk comfortably. For example, last weekend we spent the afternoon at a nearby coffee shop instead of going to the park.

提案: İyi fikir var ancak ifade net değil ve mantık akışı bozulmuş. Önce açık bir görüş cümlesi söyleyin (Yes, I would), sonra sebebi spesifik olarak verin (children need outdoor activity). Ayrıca öneri veya sonuç ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, therefore) kullanarak mantığı güçlendirin.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because children spend too much time on screens and need outdoor space for exercise. Therefore, adding safe playgrounds would encourage families to spend more time outside.

提案: Cümle zamanı ve özne-yüklem uyumu düzeltilmeli; ayrıca gelecek planından bahsederken daha doğrudan olun. Kısa bir giriş yapın (Yes, there is a park...), ardından nedenini ve bir plan ekleyin. Anlatımı basit tutun ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

例: Yes, there is a small park on my street where I used to play as a child, and I would like to visit it again because it brings back good memories. I hope to go there with my family next month to show it to them.

× Yes, when I was a child I like go.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked going to parks.

The sentence uses present tense 'like' while referring to a past time ('when I was a child'), so past tense 'liked' is required. Also, 'go' should be in gerund form 'going' after 'liked' to express the activity. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past and use verb+ing after verbs that take gerunds (e.g., 'liked going').

× I got to like park.

✓ I used to go to the park.

The original is ungrammatical. 'Got to like park' is incorrect structure. To express a past habitual action, use 'used to' + base verb: 'I used to go to the park.' If you want simple past, use 'I went to the park.' Also include the article 'the' before 'park.'

× But now I think parks are boring.

✓ But now I think parks are boring.

This sentence is actually correct. It correctly uses present simple to express a current opinion. No change needed.

× No, I don't like because I think the parks are very boring for me because if I go outside, I didn't say come on, go to the park. I'd say we are good. I think, sorry, I think we are. Go to the coffee.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks because I think they are very boring for me. If I go out, I don't say 'come on, let's go to the park.' I'd say 'we're good' or 'let's go to a coffee shop.'

Multiple issues: inconsistent tenses and incorrect structures. 'I don't like' needs an object: 'going to parks.' Use 'they' instead of 'the parks' when speaking generally. 'Didn't say' is past; change to present 'don't say.' 'Come on, go to the park' should be 'come on, let's go to the park.' 'We are good' should be 'we're good.' Use 'go to a coffee shop' instead of 'go to the coffee.' Suggestions: keep present tense for current habits, use correct reporting of speech with 'let's,' and use appropriate nouns ('coffee shop').

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the children are in technology, but I think it's negative for them, I think.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because children are into technology, but I think it's negative for them.

Minor issues: 'the children are in technology' is unnatural; use 'children are into technology' or 'children are using technology.' The phrase 'I think' is repeated; remove redundancy. The modal 'would like' is correctly used to express desire. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and use natural collocations ('into technology').

× They are preferring go to the park.

✓ They prefer going to the park.

'Prefer' is a stative verb usually not used in continuous forms, so 'are preferring' is incorrect. Use simple present 'prefer' for habits. After 'prefer,' use gerund 'going' or infinitive with 'to': 'prefer to go.' Also include 'the' if referring to specific park(s): here general, so 'going to the park' or 'going to parks.'

× When I was a child and my friends were child, we was go to the park in my street.

✓ When I was a child and my friends were children, we used to go to the park on my street.

Multiple errors: 'my friends were child' should be plural 'children.' 'We was go' has wrong auxiliary and form; use 'we used to go' for habitual past actions. Use 'on my street' or 'in my street' depending on dialect; 'on my street' is common. Suggestion: use plural nouns and 'used to' for past habits, and correct auxiliary verbs.

× I think I will go to the this park because I love my child's park.

✓ I think I will go to this park because I love my childhood park.

Errors: 'the this park' duplicates articles — remove 'the.' 'My child's park' wrongly uses possessive; to refer to the park from childhood, use 'my childhood park.' Future 'I will go' is fine. Suggestion: avoid double articles and use correct noun forms like 'childhood' to form adjectives.