Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give a brief reason with correct grammar and a time reference. Avoid unclear words like “frequency.” Use one or two supporting details and a linking word to connect them.

例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. However, I didn’t go very often because my parents were busy, so I usually played near our home instead.

提案: Give a direct answer and use correct verb forms. Use a linking word to explain why you go less often. Replace vague phrases like “disagree much time” with clear expressions such as “don’t have much time.” Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I still like parks, but I don’t visit them often because I am very busy with my job. When I do go, I usually go on weekends to relax.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar and plural forms. Provide one specific reason and an example of activities you enjoy to make your answer richer. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: Absolutely. I would like more parks because they have many trees and space for people to exercise. For example, I enjoy jogging and reading on park benches, which helps me relax.

提案: Be specific and avoid filler sounds like “MMM.” Start with a clear statement of one or two parks you want to visit and give a brief reason. Use linking words to add detail and keep it to two sentences.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York City because I’ve heard it has beautiful paths and many events. I’d also like to see local parks when I travel to experience different cultures.

× Yes, I did, but back then I didn't have anyone to take me to the park frequency.

✓ Yes, I did, but back then I didn't have anyone to take me to the park frequently.

The word 'frequency' is a noun and is incorrect here; the adverb 'frequently' should modify the verb 'take'. This is a word choice/adverb formation error. Use adverbs (often, frequently, rarely) to describe how often an action happens. Also 'did' correctly indicates past tense, so no tense change is needed. Note: The Grammar_Problem_Type_List does not include a direct 'word choice' or 'adverb formation' label, so this is treated under Present tense issue (ID 6) for the purposes of this response.

× I think so, but now I am very busy with job so I disagree much time to go to the park.

✓ I think so, but now I am very busy with my job so I don't have much time to go to the park.

Multiple issues: missing article 'my' before 'job', incorrect verb 'disagree' (wrong meaning) and wrong structure 'disagree much time'. The intended meaning is lack of time, so use 'don't have much time'. Maintain present continuous 'am very busy' and present simple 'don't have' to express current situation. This fits the present-tense context.

× Absolutely, because Park have a lot of trees and lot of people doing activity.

✓ Absolutely, because the park has a lot of trees and a lot of people doing activities.

Several issues: 'Park' should be 'the park' (article required) and is singular so verb must be 'has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Lot of people' needs 'a lot of people'. 'Doing activity' is ungrammatical; use the plural noun 'activities' or a gerund phrase like 'doing activities'. This corrects article use, singular/plural agreement, and noun number.

× It's very relaxing to visit Park.

✓ It's very relaxing to visit the park.

The noun 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to parks in general or a particular park already implied. Omitting 'the' is incorrect. Keep the sentence in present simple as an opinion.

× MMM I would like to visit any part wherever I go maybe. Central Park in New York City.

✓ Hmm, I would like to visit any park wherever I go, maybe Central Park in New York City.

Original has word 'part' instead of 'park' (spelling error) and the sentence fragments are disorganized. Combine fragments into one clear sentence: 'I would like to visit any park wherever I go, maybe Central Park in New York City.' This fixes word choice, word order, and fragmentation while keeping the future intention/modal 'would like' appropriate.