Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since it asks about childhood), avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents to a nearby park where we would feed the ducks and have picnics on the grass, which made those weekends very relaxing.

提案: Answer directly in present tense and be more natural with verbs. Limit to 3–4 sentences, use linking words (for example, especially, moreover), and provide specific activities you do there.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially at the weekend. For example, I often meet my best friend there to have coffee, play with the neighbourhood cats, and sometimes have a small picnic, which helps me relax after a busy week.

提案: Be precise and fluent: respond directly, avoid hesitation words (uh), and explain why you want more parks with a specific reason. Use linking words to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and a place to relax. For instance, a new park opened last week that I saw on social media; I hope to visit it soon because it looks well-designed and family friendly.

提案: Be specific and accurate: correct vocabulary (park, not part; landmarks), avoid fillers, and give clear reasons why you want to visit. Use one topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details (what interests you, what you expect to do there).

例: Yes, there is a park in Oran I would like to visit in the future. It reportedly has several boutiques and large landmarks nearby, so I would like to explore the shops, enjoy the scenery, and take photographs.

× Yes, I do like enjoying my time in parks.

✓ Yes, I liked enjoying my time in parks.

The question asks about childhood (past), so the verb should be past tense. 'Do like enjoying' is awkward: use 'liked enjoying' to match past context and correct verb tense agreement. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past habits, e.g. 'I enjoyed my time in parks.'

× I'm used to go with my parents and several parks to enjoy our time there and relaxing.

✓ I used to go to parks with my parents to enjoy our time there and relax.

'Used to' for past habits should be followed by the base form of the verb (go). The structure 'used to go with my parents and several parks' is incorrect; 'go to parks' is correct. Also 'and relaxing' should be parallel with 'enjoy' so use 'and relax.' Suggestion: Use 'used to' + base verb and keep coordinate verbs parallel.

× Yes, I just still like to enjoy my time in the park, especially with my friends.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy my time in the park, especially with my friends.

'Just still like to enjoy' is wordy and slightly ungrammatical. For habitual present, use simple present 'I still enjoy.' Avoid 'to enjoy' after 'like' in this context or rephrase: 'I still like to enjoy' -> 'I enjoy.' Suggestion: Use simple present for current habits and prefer 'I enjoy' or 'I still like to'.

× I'm used to go with my best friend to the park, having coffee there and playing with cats or have picnic especially on weekends.

✓ I usually go with my best friend to the park, have coffee there, and play with the cats or have a picnic, especially on weekends.

'Used to' is incorrect for present routines; use 'usually' or 'I often'. Also verbs in a list must be parallel: 'have coffee, play, and have a picnic.' Use articles: 'a picnic' and 'the cats' if specific. Ensure consistent verb forms. Suggestion: Use adverbs of frequency for present habits and keep verbs parallel.

× Yes, I would really like to visit more parks in my city, especially 1 park that opened last week.

✓ Yes, I would really like to visit more parks in my city, especially one park that opened last week.

Use the word 'one' spelled out in normal writing instead of the numeral '1'. This is not strictly grammatical but improves formality. The sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: Spell out small numbers in spoken/written responses.

× I haven't personally been to, I just uh, saw it from my footage on social media.

✓ I haven't personally been there; I only saw it in footage on social media.

The clause 'I haven't personally been to' is incomplete (missing object). Use 'been there.' Also 'saw it from my footage' is incorrect: 'saw it in footage' or 'in a video' is correct. 'Just uh' is filler and should be removed for clarity. Suggestion: Complete the phrasal verb 'been to/been there' and use correct preposition 'in' for footage.

× Yes, I want to talk about a park that I haven't personally been to.

✓ Yes, I want to talk about a park that I haven't personally been to yet.

Sentence is mostly correct but adding 'yet' clarifies expectation of future visit. No major pronoun error; improved for naturalness. Suggestion: Add 'yet' to indicate a future intention.

× Uh, this part located in Oran has several boutiques and big marks.

✓ This park, located in Oran, has several boutiques and large markets.

'This part located in Oran' is incorrect; likely 'park' not 'part.' 'Big marks' is incorrect English; 'large markets' fits context. Also add commas for the nonrestrictive clause. Suggestion: Use correct nouns ('park', 'markets') and appropriate modifiers ('large').