Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần phát triển câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi phát âm và ngữ pháp; đưa ra câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi giải thích lí do cụ thể và ngắn gọn (1-3 câu). Chú ý dùng từ vựng đúng (park, childhood, relax, stress) và nối ý bằng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so".

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they helped me relax after a busy day. For example, I used to play on the swings and run on the grass with my friends, which made me feel happy and refreshed.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và chỉnh ngữ pháp (thì, đại từ, động từ). Sử dụng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi mở rộng bằng chi tiết cụ thể và liên từ (for example, because, so). Tránh phát âm sai từ trọng yếu (park, stress).

例: Yes, I still like going to parks now because they help me unwind after a long day. For example, I often walk in a nearby park for 30 minutes and listening to music makes me feel calmer and more energetic.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc; sử dụng cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh để giải thích lý do (I wouldn't because... / I would because...). Nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh quan hoặc nhu cầu cộng đồng và dùng liên từ (because, for example, however).

例: I wouldn't necessarily want more parks because my city already has many green areas and mountains. For example, there are several tree-lined promenades and flower gardens near my home that provide enough space for walking and relaxing.

提案: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng, sửa lỗi từ vựng và tên riêng (Paris, Disneyland). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi nêu lý do và chi tiết cụ thể (what park, when, why). Dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do và ví dụ (because, for example).

例: Yes, I would love to visit Disneyland in Paris in the future because I enjoy theme parks and it would be a dream trip. For example, I want to try the famous rides and see the parades, which would be fun and memorable.

× Jazz I don't mind going to pass and when a child because in system gives me a feeling worse after a day's office.

✓ I didn't mind going to parks as a child because it gave me a feeling of relief after a day's work.

The original sentence has incorrect word choices and word order making it unclear. 'Jazz' and 'pass' are wrong words; 'parks' is plural; tense should be past ('didn't mind', 'gave'). 'in system' and 'feeling worse' are incorrect phrases. Suggestion: use clear subjects and verbs, correct tense for past habits, and proper nouns: 'parks', 'gave', 'feeling of relief'. This explanation is in English.

× Jess I do I still like going those bad now because when I going through purse I feel better after all day.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to parks now because when I walk through them I feel better after the whole day.

Errors include incorrect filler words ('Jess'), incorrect object phrase ('going those bad'), wrong verb form ('when I going'), and word choice ('purse' likely 'parks' or 'paths'). Tense: use present simple for habitual action ('I still like', 'I feel'). Use correct preposition 'to' with 'going', and correct verb form 'walk' with 'when I walk through them'. Suggestion: keep present simple for current habits and use correct prepositions and verb forms.

× No, I wouldn't because my city is my feeling. So is have many trees, many flower, many mountain and I like, I like.

✓ No, I wouldn't because my city feels great. It has many trees, many flowers, and many mountains, and I like it.

Problems: 'my city is my feeling' is ungrammatical; 'So is have' mixes structures; missing plural forms ('flower' -> 'flowers', 'mountain' -> 'mountains'); pronoun missing object ('I like it'). Use present simple 'has' for possession. Suggestion: describe feelings as 'feels great' and use correct plural nouns and include object pronouns.

× Yes, yeah, I want to go to the past in future. Uh, for example, the Paris is Disney. I want to go to Disney parks because it's my goal.

✓ Yes, I want to go to parks in the future. For example, Disneyland Paris. I want to go to Disney parks because it's my goal.

Errors: 'go to the past in future' uses wrong word 'past' instead of 'parks' or 'abroad'; article misuse ('the Paris is Disney') and word order issues. Use 'in the future' for future plans and correct proper noun 'Disneyland Paris'. Ensure noun phrases are accurate. Suggestion: use 'in the future' and correct names like 'Disneyland Paris'.