Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答をより自然で文法的に正しくし、冗長な繰り返しを避けること。具体的には、時制を過去形に統一し、固有名詞は一度正確に言い直し、不要な「uh」「they, they, they」を減らす。トピック文の後に1〜2の具体的な詳細（場所、特徴、理由）を論理的な接続詞でつなげると良い。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. My favorite was Dosan Park, which was the closest to my house. It was very large and had a big slide, so I enjoyed playing there with my friends.

提案: 現在の習慣について話す際は、簡潔な主張の後に明確な理由を添える。動詞の語順と前置詞（go to parks）を正しく使い、同じ理由を重複して述べないこと。接続詞で文をつなげ、文を2〜3文に収める。

例: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I rarely have time to visit them now. I am busy studying and attending school, so I usually use my free time for homework instead.

提案: 理由を整理して明確に述べる。ペットの話をする場合は単語と代名詞（dogs → my dog / they）を正しく使い、文を簡潔に。不要な言い淀みを避け、具体的な希望（どの地域に、どんな設備の公園が欲しいか）を一つ添えると良い。

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because I have a dog who loves walking. For example, a small green park near my neighborhood with walking paths would be very useful.

提案: 目的地について話すときは、正しい地名と特徴を簡潔に説明する。文法（has → has a / have → has）と語順を直し、具体的な要素（例えば“river, markets, food stalls”）を一つか二つ述べる。感情表現は短くまとめる。

例: I'd like to visit Myeongdong Park in the future. It's famous for its riverside area and many food stalls, so I think it would be fun to try local snacks there.

× Yes, I like going to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The question asks about past preference as a child, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'liked' not 'like' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense when referring to habits or preferences in the past (e.g., 'I liked going to parks when I was a child').

× I my favorite park is uh, Josan Cohen, Dosan Cohen is most nearby my house.

✓ My favorite park is Dosan Park; it is the closest to my house.

Multiple issues: missing possessive phrase start and wrong article/word choice. Use 'My favorite park is Dosan Park' (correct name) and 'the closest to my house' for the superlative with a definite article. Suggestion: Begin the sentence with 'My' for possession, use the correct park name, and use 'the closest' to express nearest location.

× This park is very big and also they, they, they are have a big slide.

✓ This park is very big and it also has a big slide.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun choice: 'park' is singular so use 'it' not 'they' and use 'has' as the correct verb. Remove extra filler words. Suggestion: Match singular subjects with singular pronouns and verbs (it + has).

× I like that because it is so fun for.

✓ I like that because it is so much fun.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect word 'for' at the end. Use 'so much fun' to describe enjoyment. Suggestion: Use 'so much fun' or 'very fun' rather than 'so fun for'.

× Yes, I like going to parks now, but to be honest, I don't go parks lots of time because I don't have enough time for go to parks because I need to.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now, but to be honest, I don't go to parks very often because I don't have enough time.

Incorrect verb patterns and missing prepositions: use 'go to parks' not 'go parks', and 'very often' is the correct adverbial phrase. Also remove redundant clause. Suggestion: Use 'go to' with places and 'very often' to indicate frequency.

× I have to do study and go to school so I don't have time.

✓ I have to study and go to school, so I don't have time.

Incorrect use of 'do study' instead of the verb 'study'. After 'have to', use base form 'study'. Suggestion: Use 'have to' + base verb (have to study).

× Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because uh, I have dogs and my dogs really like to go walk, but my house is my city has been don't have many parks so he want to go more.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because I have dogs and they really like to go for walks, but my city doesn't have many parks so they want to go more often.

Multiple issues: pronoun errors, tense and agreement, incorrect preposition. Use 'they' for dogs, 'go for walks' is correct phrase, 'my city doesn't have' is correct negative present, and 'they want to go more often' for plural subject. Suggestion: Use correct plural pronouns and idiomatic expressions: 'go for walks' and 'doesn't have' for singular 'city'.

× I want to go to Myeongdong park.

✓ I want to go to Myeongdong Park.

Capitalization and name consistency: use proper noun capitalization and exact name. Suggestion: Capitalize proper nouns (Park) and use consistent spelling.

× Myung park has in a career and this park is very popular because this park have a very big river and many people eat noodle in this park.

✓ Myeongdong Park is well known and very popular because it has a large stream and many people eat noodles there.

Awkward phrasing and grammar: 'has in a career' is incorrect; likely intended 'is well known' or 'has a feature'. Use 'it has' for possession and 'noodles' plural, and 'there' for location. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb construction and correct vocabulary (stream/river) and plural nouns when appropriate.

× It so looks so fun so I want to go.

✓ It looks really fun, so I want to go.

Redundant 'so' and wrong word order 'It so looks so fun'. Use standard adverb placement: 'It looks really fun'. Suggestion: Use 'it looks' + adjective/adverb: 'It looks really fun.'