Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms (liked, went), possessive/plural forms (friends, parents), and accurate verbs (ask my parents to take me, play). Keep answer concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail. Use linking phrase such as “because” or “so” correctly.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because my friends were usually there, so I often asked my parents to take me so we could play together.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific: use articles (the park), avoid repetitions (now/nowadays), and add one clear supporting detail with a linking word like “because” or “and”. Mention frequency or benefit to enrich content.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because I am into running; I usually go to the park with my girlfriend three times a week and I like the lively atmosphere with many runners.

提案: Correct grammar and clarity: state position clearly (I live on the outskirts), fix vocabulary (notably -> not many parks), remove repetition (“to to”), and give a specific reason and consequence using linking words like “because” and “so”.

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because I live on the outskirts and there are not many parks nearby, so I often have to travel far to go running.

提案: Improve accuracy and cohesion: correct location phrasing (I’m in Bangkok’s city center or I live in Bangkok), use article and name correctly (Lumphini Park), use relative clauses and linking words for coherence, and provide a clear reason why you want to go (atmosphere, facilities).

例: Yes, there is a park I want to visit in Bangkok’s city center called Lumphini Park because many people run there and the photos I’ve seen show a pleasant, energetic atmosphere good for runners.

× Yes, I think I like go to the park when I was a child because I usually have my friend there so I always ask my parent to block me there so I could pay.

✓ Yes, I think I liked going to the park when I was a child because I usually had my friends there, so I always asked my parents to take me there so I could play.

Multiple tense and verb form issues: 'think I like go' should match past reference 'when I was a child' so use past tense 'liked' and gerund 'going' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 8). 'Usually have my friend' should be past 'had' and plural 'friends' (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 6). 'Ask my parent' should be past 'asked' and plural 'parents' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 1). 'Block me' is incorrect word choice; 'take me' is appropriate. 'Could pay' is likely intended as 'could play' (word choice). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use correct verb forms and plurals.

× Yes, I like to go to park nowadays because I would say I am very into running now. I usually go to park with my girlfriend and I have seen a lot of people running at the park so.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park nowadays because I am very into running. I usually go to the park with my girlfriend and I have seen a lot of people running there.

Errors: 'to go to park' needs the definite article 'the park' (Grammar Problem Type 17). Unnecessary 'would say I am' and extra 'now' — use simple present 'I am very into running' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Repeat 'go to park' needs 'the'. 'at the park so' is incomplete; use 'there' or remove 'so'. Suggestion: use definite article with 'park', simplify present-tense expressions, and finish clauses clearly.

× Yes, now I am living at the outskirts of the notably with not having a lot of park so I would go for far away to to running.

✓ Yes, now I am living on the outskirts of the city, where there are not many parks, so I have to go far away to run.

Multiple issues: use preposition 'on the outskirts' not 'at the outskirts' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'of the notably' is incorrect word choice; likely 'of the city'. 'Not having a lot of park' should be 'there are not many parks' (plural and article issues; Grammar Problem Types 1 and 22). 'Go for far away to to running' should be 'go far away to run' using infinitive 'to run' (Grammar Problem Type 8) and remove duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions, plural nouns, and infinitive for purpose.

× Yes, I'm in the city center of the Bangkok. There is a park called Lupini Park. There are so many people go there for running and I've seen a lot of videos or photos of them. That quite a good atmosphere for runners.

✓ Yes, I'm in the city center of Bangkok. There is a park called Lumpini Park. Many people go there to run, and I've seen a lot of videos and photos of them. It has quite a good atmosphere for runners.

Errors: 'the city center of the Bangkok' should be 'the city center of Bangkok' or 'the city center' without 'the' before proper noun (Grammar Problem Type 22/17). Park name likely 'Lumpini Park' (spelling). 'There are so many people go there' needs simple present 'Many people go there' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 26). 'go there for running' should be 'go there to run' (Verb + -ing vs infinitive; Grammar Problem Type 8). 'videos or photos' better 'videos and photos' (conjunction choice; Grammar Problem Type 16). 'That quite a good atmosphere' lacks verb; use 'It has quite a good atmosphere' (Grammar Problem Type 23). Suggestion: correct articles with place names, use simple present for habitual actions, choose infinitive for purpose, and include verbs in sentences.