Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần nói trực tiếp, rõ ràng câu chủ đề, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, dùng từ phù hợp (ví dụ: "park" số ít/ số nhiều), tránh lặp từ và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (because, so, and). Ví dụ gợi ý: mở đầu bằng câu trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể và một kỷ niệm ngắn nếu có.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were fun and relaxing. For example, I used to play on swings and ride my bike with friends every afternoon. My parents often joined us, which made those visits special and memorable.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ ràng bằng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ; sửa cấu trúc và ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "not my cup of tea" dùng tốt nhưng cần nối ý rõ). Tránh nói lặp và mơ hồ; cho biết tần suất hoặc hoàn cảnh cụ thể nếu có.

例: No, I don't go to parks much these days because I live close to my university and usually prefer studying at home. I also find it more convenient to exercise at the campus gym than to travel to a park.

提案: Ý tốt nhưng cần dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: "green spaces" thay vì "blade"), số động từ phải đúng với chủ từ, và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ lợi ích cho cộng đồng hoặc sức khỏe). Sử dụng liên từ (for example, because) để kết nối và mở rộng ý trong giới hạn 3–4 câu.

例: Yes, I would. More parks would provide green spaces that improve air quality and encourage people to exercise. For example, new parks could offer walking paths and playgrounds where families can relax and children can play.

提案: Cần tránh lặp ý với câu trước, trả lời trực tiếp và nêu lý do cụ thể, đồng thời cân nhắc thêm một khả năng trong tương lai để thể hiện suy nghĩ mở hơn. Sửa ngữ pháp (I don't want to go to parks; I don't really like going outside). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và liên kết bằng "because" hoặc "however".

例: Not really; I don't plan to visit many parks in the future because I prefer staying at home and find it more comfortable. However, I might visit a park occasionally if a friend invites me or there is a special event.

× Definitely yes, for sure Park is the place where cure every children children has come once.

✓ Definitely yes. Parks are places that every child has visited at least once.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: incorrect noun plurality, wrong word order, and redundant words. Use plural 'parks' and singular 'child' for each individual, or plural 'children' with corresponding verb. Use 'places that every child has visited at least once' to convey the idea clearly. Suggestion: break into two sentences and use correct subject-verb agreement and word order.

× The reason is is that park is the the way that children can entertain and their parents can, uh, make fun with the children.

✓ The reason is that parks are places where children can have fun and their parents can enjoy time with them.

Problems: duplicated 'is', duplicated 'the', incorrect phrase 'the way that children can entertain' and awkward 'make fun with the children'. Use 'parks are places where' and verbs 'have fun' and 'enjoy time with' for natural expression. Also fix plurality and remove filler sounds.

× Park is not my cup of tea.

✓ Parks are not my cup of tea.

Using singular 'Park' is unnatural when speaking generally; use plural 'parks' to talk about parks in general. 'Parks are not my cup of tea' correctly generalizes the dislike.

× Uh, the reason a big part of reasons goes to the fact that now I am, I think I'm near to the university, so I don't like to, to the parks to put place just like at home.

✓ A big part of the reason is that I now live near the university, so I don't like to go to parks; I prefer to stay at home.

Original has awkward phrasing 'goes to the fact', incorrect preposition 'near to', incorrect verb form and redundant words. Use 'a big part of the reason is that' and 'I live near the university' and 'I don't like to go to parks' for correct grammar and clarity.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

Add a comma for natural spoken response; grammar is acceptable but punctuation clarifies the spoken pause.

× Parks have lots of trees and it can protect the environment.

✓ Parks have lots of trees and they can protect the environment.

Mismatch: 'Parks' is plural, so use 'they' not 'it'. Keep plural pronoun to agree with subject.

× Another reason is that parks is the blade that people use to relax and and go to do exercise every day.

✓ Another reason is that parks are places people use to relax and exercise every day.

Errors: 'parks is' should be 'parks are'; 'blade' is incorrect word choice (probably meant 'place'); 'go to do exercise' is awkward—use 'exercise'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and appropriate vocabulary.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

The original question from examiner is fine. Suggested student-style phrasing uses 'would like to visit' which is more natural for future preference; this entry included for consistency with corrections.

× Parks is not my cup of tea, so I think I don't want to go parks in the future.

✓ Parks are not my cup of tea, so I don't think I want to go to parks in the future.

Use plural 'parks are' and include preposition 'to' after 'go'. Also place 'don't think' before 'I want' for natural negation. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb-preposition combination.

× Uh, the reasons is that I'm not really like to go outside.

✓ The reason is that I don't really like going outside.

Incorrect use of 'like to go' with 'I'm not really like' which is ungrammatical. Use 'I don't really like going outside' or 'I don't really like to go outside'. Also fix 'reasons is' to 'reason is'.

× Umm, I'm a bit lazy for it.

✓ I'm a bit lazy about it.

Use 'lazy about it' or 'too lazy to go' for natural English. 'Lazy for it' is incorrect preposition usage.