Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and well organized with a topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, correct subject-verb agreement and tighten phrasing to sound more natural. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat the same idea about health twice).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because the fresh air and greenery made me feel energetic. Also, seeing other people exercise encouraged me to join in, so I spent a lot of time playing and staying active.

提案: Good direct response with reasons. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'motivate' → 'motivates'), and combine related ideas with a linking word to avoid short choppy sentences. Replace vague phrases with slightly more specific details about activities you do there.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the air is much fresher than in crowded malls, and I often go for a short walk there to relax. Besides reducing stress, it also motivates me to exercise regularly, which helps my overall health.

提案: Strong content with relevant reasons and examples. Fix minor grammar (plural agreement: 'places that helps' → 'places that help') and improve flow by using a linking phrase between the two main reasons. Be a bit more concise and specific about how parks make the city pleasant.

例: Yes, I would. More parks encourage people to exercise — for example, walking, jogging or playing sports — which improves public health. Furthermore, they provide green areas that help absorb carbon and reduce heat, making the city more pleasant to live in.

提案: Very good answer: specific destination, reasons and concrete activities. To reach a higher band, add one linking word and a brief detail to show personal connection or planning (e.g., which wildlife or which park), and avoid repeating 'I would'.

例: Yes, I want to visit a national park in New Zealand because I’ve heard it has unique wildlife such as kiwi birds and seals. I’d love to photograph the animals and join a guided walk to learn about their habitats and conservation efforts.

× ...seeing other people exercise motivate me to join in.

✓ ...seeing other people exercise motivates me to join in.

The verb 'motivate' refers to the singular subject 'seeing other people exercise' (a gerund phrase treated as singular) so it requires the third person singular form 'motivates'. Use 'motivates' to agree with the singular subject. Suggestion: Identify the subject of the verb (here the gerund phrase) and use third-person singular '-s' for present simple verbs.

× Spending time there helped me stay active and healthy.

✓ Spending time there helped me to stay active and healthy.

After 'helped' both 'stay' and 'to stay' are possible; however, adding 'to' makes the infinitive explicit and clearer. This is a style preference rather than strict grammar error, but 'helped me to stay' is more natural in formal contexts. Suggestion: Use 'helped me to stay' for clarity, especially in formal speech.

× Going to the park helps me relax and refresh my mind and it also motivate me to exercise so I can stay healthy.

✓ Going to the park helps me relax and refresh my mind, and it also motivates me to exercise so I can stay healthy.

Compound sentence: 'it' is the singular subject for 'motivate', so the verb needs the third person singular form 'motivates'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate the clauses. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with their subjects and punctuate compound sentences with a comma before coordinating conjunctions linking independent clauses.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks because they encourage people to exercise, for example walking, jogging or playing sports which improves public health.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks because they encourage people to exercise, for example by walking, jogging, or playing sports, which improve public health.

The relative clause 'which improves' refers to 'walking, jogging, or playing sports' (plural activities), so the verb should be plural 'improve'. Also add 'by' to introduce examples and commas to set off the nonrestrictive clause. Suggestion: Match verb number to the noun or noun phrase the clause refers to; use 'by' for example activities and add commas around nonrestrictive clauses.

× They also provide green places that helps absorb carbon and combat climate change, making city more pleasant and suitable.

✓ They also provide green places that help absorb carbon and combat climate change, making the city more pleasant and suitable.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'green places' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'help' not 'helps'. Also 'city' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the speaker's city. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number and use articles ('the city') when speaking about a specific city.