Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并且语法更准确；注意时态和冠词的使用，并减少冗长句子。可以先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持。比如说明家乡规模、常去的游戏场所和感受。

例: No, I didn't. I grew up in a small town that had no public parks, so I usually played at home or in a nearby field. Because of that, I rarely had the chance to visit formal parks.

提案: 回答总体良好但需注意单复数和细节表达，避免含糊。可以用连接词使句子更连贯，并补充具体活动或频率以增加内容丰富度。

例: Yes, I do. Parks are lovely places where I can exercise, for example by running or playing badminton. I also meet other parents and children there, so it's a good opportunity to socialise on weekends.

提案: 句子有语法错误和未完成部分，注意主谓一致和句子完整性。最好先给出直接回答，然后用具体例子说明公园的好处并完整表达结论。

例: Yes, I would. More parks would be peaceful and improve people's health. For example, I could go jogging in the mornings and take my child to play on weekends, and more green space would reduce pollution and stress.

提案: 回答内容明确但有重复和少量用词问题，避免重复句子并增加细节（如具体活动或时间安排）。使用连词提高流畅性。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the nearby National Park. It has beautiful mountains and lakes, so it would be perfect for hiking and photography. I plan to go there with a friend next summer to relax and take photos.

× No, I didn't go to parks when I was a child because I was born in small town that didn't have public parks in city and to play at home or in the field near my house so I didn't have many chance to visit or park.

✓ No, I didn't go to parks when I was a child because I was born in a small town that didn't have public parks in the city, and I used to play at home or in the field near my house, so I didn't have many chances to visit parks.

句中有可數名詞單複數使用錯誤：small town 應加不定冠詞 a；many chance 應為複數 chances；park 用法不當，改為 visit parks。建議注意可數名詞在單數時需要冠詞，表示多次或多個時使用複數形式。

× There are lovely place where I can get some exercise by running or playing games, and I often meet other children there, so it's also a good chance to make friends.

✓ There are lovely places where I can get some exercise by running or playing games, and I often meet other children there, so it's also a good chance to make friends.

主語 there be 結構中的名詞須與動詞數一致：lovely place 應為複數 places 以配合 are。建議檢查 there is/there are 與後接名詞的單複數一致。

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because there are peaceful and good for people's health.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they are peaceful and good for people's health.

原句中用 there are + 形容詞短語 結構不完整；應使用代詞 they 來指代前文的 parks，並接形容詞。建議使用代詞連接描述，確保句子結構完整。

× For example, I can go jogging there in the mornings and take my child to play on weekends. More green space would also.

✓ For example, I can go jogging there in the mornings and take my child to play on weekends. More green space would also be beneficial.

最後一句不完整，缺少謂語或賓語，導致片段句。應補全意思，例如 be beneficial（會有益處）。建議寫完整句子，確保主語和謂語齊全。

× It has beautiful mountains and lakes, so I think it would be relaxing and good for hiking for example.

✓ It has beautiful mountains and lakes, so I think it would be relaxing and good for hiking, for example.

原句中 for example 插入位置和標點需調整以保持流暢；hiking 前不需額外介詞。建議在插入語前用逗號分隔，並確保動名詞形式使用正確。

× I want to go there. I want to go there with my friend next summer to work and take photos.

✓ I want to go there with my friend next summer to relax and take photos.

重複句子顯得冗贅且語意不清：原句說 to work and take photos 與前文放鬆、登山語境不符。建議合併句子並明確表達目的（relax 或 hike），使語義一致且句子更簡潔。